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for Carry On My Wayward Son

by Danyealle

schedule October 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
0o0o0o0oh he finally told him. Wonder what Sam's gonna say? -snerk-
schedule October 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
hehe, poor Sam. And you know, for some effed up reason during this whole chapter i kept thinking about that comic on DA. You know which one, had an agnel watching porn? Well the ed scene of that strip kept dancing around in my head while reading this, no idea why. But I kept giggling all the way through because of it, even though this part is supposed to be serious lmao.
schedule October 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Lol, I love Bobby. You write him so well XD. Wonder how the boys are going to be with with each other on their next call. Last one didn't end so well.:/
schedule October 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I say again, poor Sam lol. And poor Cas too, little angel is losing his way. Also, I freaking hate Zachariah. I hope you blow him up soon. :/
schedule October 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
hehe, open with a wet dream. thats freaking awesome lmao. Dont think Sam felt the same though.XD

Hahahaha. I think their brains are gonna shut down lol. Then they will wake up next to each other and wonder how they got there. :x Hahahahahaha! I know thats not gonna happen, but that would be funny. Maybe you could do a one shot comedy? -wiggles plunnie- :D
schedule October 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM

throws bone-shaped treat to puppy and watches as it bounds away playfully

without anymore unwelcome dreams - spoilsport! And they're not really that unwelcome... Sam just protests too much!

I found it interesting that Sam corrected Dean on the nickname. Equally interesting is how Dean lapsed thrice after the correction and called him Sammy, each time when he was trying to reassure Sam, or validate his emotions.

I love the descriptions of Dean's excitement - like a boy with his first crush, which - in a way - this is, since it's his first (admitted) desire for a member of the same gender. I also really like the fact that Dean immediately addresses the fact that he would never force his brother, wanting to cement the fact that any physical relationship that would develop between them would be completely mutually consensual.

The messenger-cam-as-sleep-aid works really well here, and I like that Dean wants to continue it. It's a very good way for both of them to observe and to be observed, and maybe for Sam to start coping with his suppressed emotions. I look forward to seeing how this plot device develops.

As an aside, the conversation with Bobby could be quite amusing! Though I'm not sure there's enough liquor in the world to eliminate the mental image for him if Sam were to let him know where he is emotionally. Especially since Bobby's pushing for them to be in close physical proximity to each other. hee hee

I look forward to your next update, as always! Thank you for an excellent read.

person Cappy712
schedule September 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Awe...... Wow what a start but awe.... Dean really trying to reach out to Sam and help. What A great update!

Looking forward to the next installation!
schedule September 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM

dodges vicious plot bunny and throws food

I really felt the indecision coming through from Sam, and the relief from Dean in this chapter. Although, I do think Sam is being a spoilsport, not wanting to have those erotic dreams again!

Bobby's statement to Sam, to encourage meeting up with Dean, was rather amusing given that he had no way of knowing exactly why Sam would want to avoid it.

I must say that Sam's statement that Dean was too much of a ladies' man reminded me of the line so far in, he doesn't even realize there is a closet. It made me chuckle. And Sam's realization that Dean fits his description of his perfect partner was beautifully done. I like how I can feel that he's fighting it, the way anyone in his situation might, but that you can see he's recognizing it at the same time.

I loved how Zachariah didn't realize when he was talking to Asmodeus that Castiel's visit to the chapel was after their talk, thinking that he's now straightened Cas out.

And I had never before considered anything angelic to be sinister. I actually shuddered when I read that Zachariah was smiling angelically. That was a wonderfully captured sentiment.

I had wondered when Chuck was going to appear. I love his commentary!

I know, when this piece is finished, it's going to be one that I sit down and read all the way through just for the suspense from one chapter to the next. (Yes, this is me saying that I am eagerly awaiting your next update, but I really, truly mean this!)

As always, thank you for sharing this!

person Cappy712
schedule September 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
thank you for an awesome update.... So many things .. the questions that I had during season 4 as to why things where happening the way they were and the fact that they didn't find out what was going on and you are just hitting them... awesome. always thought that Zachariah was really up to no good, liked the fact that you had it where Lilith's son wanted to just use the humans - Zach was trying to keep it under wraps (they are hidding things from each other too - wow). Looking forward to the next chapter and to see what your marveouls brain has cooked up for the story..... thank you
schedule September 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM

...must...leave...review....

I know you don't think Cas is quite right, but after reading it a couple times, I think for the moment in his development that this is, his voice fits his character. He is at that moment where, like in City of Angels, he is learning that angels are God's creations as well and have been given just as much free will as humans have. Point being, I think his burgeoning self-awareness is coming through. That being inherently awkward, it also makes for much awkwardness.

For example, I think you captured his hesitance well where you've got him questioning the decision of drawing Sam back onto the field. Questioning Dean being left in the dark. Questioning not protecting the site of the last seal.

I like how he puts Zachariah off with saying that he is only questioning in order to be able to convince Dean. And on some level, he may even believe that - at this point. He's not yet fully 'awakened.'

I like how you emphasize several times how powerful the side of "good" is perceived. It makes me wonder what reaction we will witness when they realize that "good" is a relative term. Even though Dean and Bobby don't use that term (I don't think), they mention that they think that the angels are more powerful than demons. Bobby starts to light on the perception with the statement about the tactics that might employed to persuade one to their side...

I really liked Dean's slowly drawn conclusion. I could really see the wheels turning there for him as the pieces gently fell into place and as that last cog was fitted into the machine... bam! That was a beautiful moment.

I thought Bobby came through very well in this chapter also. I'm very grateful to you for the inclusion of all the other characters of the show as well. It has made this story riveting.

Now, hypnotoad has given a new directive:

Wait patiently for update.