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for How I Seduced Your Father

by LyokoWarrior19

person Anon
schedule February 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Since you have quite a few careless grammar and spelling errors, I doubt you'll read this: but just because this is M/M doesn't mean you can be mysogynistic. There's some really great in character stuff, but a lot of the end dialogue is so unbelievable. I know this is a one-shot... but lady, you can still put some effort into keeping straight who the 'older' guy is, and what exactly the action is. I got confused a few times. It was hot, but so confusing that I really couldn't enjoy it.
person Anon
schedule June 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good story, but Neil Patrick Harris has blue eyes.