rate_review Reviews

This fic has potential for being an excellent crackfic.

However, it falls short, which leaves it as just a plain old cackfic.

Or how about better yet you just scrap the entire thing? If you serriously think you can improve it then go ahead and try again, but serriously just take this down before even more eyeballs bleed. It seems all you're doing is taking well known characters and making them ask for sex without even making up for it by SHOWING the sex. And what is with that Snakes on a Plane reference? "I don't write shit"? I think not... I hate leaving negative feedback but Nick is right- this IS the WORST fic on all of the internet. Find a better muse before your current one ends up leading you down a dark alley in the middle of the night.

*seriously. (it has one 'r')

out of all my thirty years of browsing the naughty adult fiction that my computer has to offer, yours has probably been the worst i have ever read. when i sit down at my computer with the lotion ready, i expect some action, not for the scene to change before the rumpy-pumpy gets done. i hope you will take my advice and add more sex scenes into your chapter, as well as explicit details about Foreman's ass - he's my favourite ;)