rate_review Reviews

The story seems good but I don't understand it. MORE SOON please so I CAN understand. Anyway a suggestion... put a space between the chapters please, it's hard to read.

~shadow

What was the all about? you have pricked my intrest ^__^ I REALLY hope you continue this

oh, I really wanna know what's going on!

now, for some constructive critism (or however it's spelled)

You switched POV a couple times, and I don't know about anyone else, but that confuses me when I'm reading. One minute it was narrative, the next it was from Jayne's POV, so you might want to work on that.

The only other thing I had a big problem with was that you didn't have any paragraphs, it was one giant block, that's difficult for me to read, so that's more of a personal peeve than anything else.

Please update!

Tabee :)

You should certainly continue the story. I must admit that I'm hooked. Sometimes the perspective was a bit confusing, but nicely written.

Okay i like it but where the hell is the sex, or whatever. This was labeled M/M slash Jayne/Simon. I saw the potental but there was nothing. um I loved what i read. I followed very well. I also thought that if there are other parts to this story the slash would have moved along very well. I saw the opening, but there was only one part. Dear Writer, FINISH THIS FIC NOW, I COMMAND YOU.

I love so please update soon!

It's good. The paragraphing could be more, but I would like to see where this goes.

Please, keep writing.

Very good start, please keep writing.

Hmmmmm. Interesting. Can't wait to see where this is heading. I love Firefly slash and there's not enough of it about. *sighs* Simon and Jayne are just sooooooooooooooo perfect together.