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brotherly love
(A/N: First and foremost, This is my first attempt at writing any sort of fanfic, so be gentle. Next I don’t own any of the characters only the sick and twisted story line. This disclaimer accounts for any and all chapters of this fic so please don’t sue me. Finally, this story contains incest and minors, if you don’t like it, you shouldn’t read it. Now on with the story)
(Saturday afternoon in Zack and Cody’s suite)
Zack and Cody had just come back from their latest adventure. They had attempted to find the lost treasure of Hot Pepper, which had been rumored to be resting in the hotel. Unfortunately, Hot Pepper’s only treasure was Muriel. After destroying another chunk of the hotel, They returned to their room on the 23rd floor to serve their sentence
Zack looked over at Cody and said “I can’t believe how mad mom and Mr. Moseby got.”
Cody turned to Zack, being pulled away from his thoughts, and gave a small smirk before saying innocently “Yeah it was only a small whole in the wall, and, on the upside, we started construction on the hotel bank that Mr. Moseby has been pining over.” Cody was trying to suppress his laughter.
Zack was now smiling from ear to ear “When you think about it, they should be thanking us instead of confining us to our room again.” with that last thought the smile faded from his face
Cody looked at Zacks distraught face and, in an attempt to cheer him up, said “What do you care, weren’t you just going to come up here to play that new video game that you got earlier today? By the time you divert your thoughts away from that game, our punishment will already be over.”
Cody was happy to see the smile on his brother’s face as he remembered the video game “Yeah that’s right,” Zack said, starting to agree with him. Then his face gave off a confused expression, then questioned “wait a second, are you insulting me?”
Cody was amused at how long it took his brother to catch onto the uptake. He was suppressing laughter, while trying to sound innocent while saying “No, of course not, would I ever insult you?”
Zack now had a grin on his face, he put his hands on his hips trying to strike a very authoritative pose “Of course you would,” he said, wagging his index finger at his brother “in a heart beat.”
Cody tried to look as though his mother was punishing him. He hadn’t had as much practice as his brother, so he failed to suppress his smile, but managed to lower his head and sound sad enough that he pulled it off. “Alright, it’s true, you caught me red handed.” he said, in as sad a tone as he could muster.
Zack mimicked the stern look that his mother gave him whenever he got in trouble to a tee. He continued to wag his finger at his brother and said sternly, but in a joking manner, “now go to your room, no dinner for you until you can behave yourself” he successfully got his voice to a pitch that resembled their mother’s. Suddenly both Zack and Cody burst into a fit of laughter. They crashed down to the floor and rolled around until they were gasping for air.
Soon Zacks short attention span took affect and, remembering his new video game, left Cody to sit on the sofa. He turned on the video game and began to play. He paid no attention to the shift on the sofa as Cody sat next to him. He could faintly here Cody giving suggestions on where to go and what to do. That soon stopped as Cody realized that Zack was to enthralled in his game to pay any attention to the advice he was giving. The room around Cody started to slip into obscurity as he began to daydream.
It was similar to the fantasy he had earlier. He was imagining that he had just accepted another award for the advancements in science that he was able to accomplish with the money he had gotten from Hot Pepper. Then he swooped a woman, at least 8 years older than him, off of her feet and into a kiss. Just then he felt a resistance from the person he was kissing. The woman’s face started to go out of focus and the face of his brother had taken its place. He then realized that it was happening again. He had leaned over his brother and was frenching him on the couch in their living room. He quickly pulled himself off and looked away, his face quickly turning a shade of red resembling that of a fire truck (red food analogy’s are so overrated)
Zack stared at his brother in disbelief. He wiped his mouth and tried to scrape the taste of his brother’s saliva off of his tongue. “Man you did again, and this time you used your tongue.” he said in a somewhat angry tone. But seeing his brother looking so embarrassed and upset, decided to try and cheer him up instead of put him down. “At least this time you didn’t drop me onto the floor afterwords and at least you did it in the privacy of our suite instead of in the lobby where all the new babes come in.” He saw his brothers mood start to shift for the better. As Cody’s eyes met to his brother’s face, Zack jokingly asked “Just what were you fantasizing about this time. It better have been something good to kiss me like that.”
Cody’s mood instantly transformed again and he began to lower his head “Sorry dude, I was just thinking about winning a prize for my scientific discoveries and ...” he started, but was quickly cut off
“That figures. You French me, and you don’t even have the decency to have a good story to go with it.” Cody gave his brother a “you didn’t let me finish” look, and Zack quickly shut up.
Cody continued to tell his story, “well it did end with this 20-year-old woman standing next to me, then I swooped her off of her feet in a self-congratulatory French kiss, but you already new that.” Cody lightened his tone at the end, smirking at his brother. He soon saw the “I’m not amused” look on his brother and quickly recovered with “And I said I was sorry.”
Zack decided to forgive his brother. “It’s ok dude, it was obviously an accident.” he said in a caring tone, then he shifted to a lighter mood and jokingly said “Just don’t let it happen again.”
(Later that night in Zack and Cody’s bedroom)
That night Cody lay asleep enthralled in the sweet embrace that is fantasy. Zack lay awake in his bed. He couldn’t get the kiss out of his mind. No one had ever kissed him that way before. He didn’t even know that his brother knew that you could kiss that way. Thoughts kept on running through his mind about how his little brother knew about such things. His thoughts drifted to what else his brother knew. Not to mention what else his brother could teach him.
His thoughts were interrupted by a shift of weight on his bed. He opened his eyes to see his reflection looking back at him. His brothers eyes were closed and his mouth was starting to pucker in preparation for a kiss. Zack decided to test the limits of his brothers knowledge. He sat back and and decided that the best way to find out how much his brother knew, was to experience the knowledge first hand.
Cody rested his left arm on Zacks right side and his right arm on Zacks left side. He placed both of his knees near his brothers left hip. He positioned his head so that it was just above his brothers head. He dropped his head a little lower and their lips connected. Zack could feel his brothers tongue press against his lips. He quickly gave clearance to the foreign object and allowed it to pass into his mouth. As he became more relaxed to the sensations, Zack forced his tongue through their connected lips and began to explore the inner workings of his brothers mouth. Zack was in heaven as he began to memorize every crevice of his brothers mouth and every sensation that he felt throughout his body.
(Cody’s dream)
Cody was on the beach, He was walking towards a person resting in the sand. He felt a sense of security and love around this person. He loomed over the persons face, their identity still masked in obscurity, and slowly lowered his head down into a kiss. Feeling over excited with the sensations running through his body as the passion between the two lovers advanced, Cody made a daring move and gently pushed his tongue to the entry way of his lovers mouth.
His lover graciously accepted the gift and opened his mouth to give entry. After several minutes, Cody felt the sensations of his partners tongue start to explore his own mouth. The passion between the two began to get more and more intense. The haze that blocked the identity of his lover began to clear away. He noticed a certain familiarity in his unnamed love. He began to see an image of Zack emerge from the haze. Cody began to fear the worst, he began to think that he had accidentally included Zack into his fantasy. He noticed that his brother had his eyes closed and was enjoying the make-out session very much. Then he noticed the fact that he was still on the beach and realized that this is what he really wanted. Cody comforted himself with the thought that this wasn’t reality, but was still fantasy.
(Back in Zack and Cody’s bedroom)
Cody moved his left leg over his brothers body so that he was directly over him. Zack was admiring how deep a sleeper his brother was, and how much he knew about lust despite any actual experience. Cody extended his legs back and wrapped his arms around his brothers body. Cody was now lying on top of Zack and intensifying his search of Zacks mouth. Zack had also wrapped his arms around his brother. Thinking how wonderful it was that they both were only wearing boxers and pajama pants. Their bare chests rubbed against each other, Their nipples began to get hard under the new activity.
Zack felt new shocks of pleasure run through his system under these new sensations. He also began to feel a pressure in his pants and a new foreign object begin to push against his legs, originating from his sleeping brothers pajama bottoms. Feeling more dangerous, he began to move his hands down his brothers back, Finally settling on his brothers butt. He lifted up the elastic of his brothers pants and boxers and pushed them down the length of his brothers legs. He could feel Cody follow suit. Soon they were both completely naked, there clothing wrapped around their respective ankles and the growth pushing against the fabric of their pants were now released and continually growing at a slow, but steady, rate.
Cody slowly cancelled the onslaught of his brothers mouth eliciting a moan from his brother. A smile stretched across his sleeping face, finding amusement in the new found power that his knowledge in this subject brought him. He moved his hands back to his brothers sides and began to trail kisses down the collarbone of his brothers neck. He could clearly hear the moans of his brother through his dreams as he slowly made his way down to his brothers, slightly toned, stomach and continued south until he reached his treasure. He kissed the head of his brothers 7 in. monster. Feeling that his brother, not to mention himself, had waited long enough, quickly took the length of his brothers cock into his mouth.
Zack quickly latched his hands into the matted fibers of his brothers, dirty blonde, hair, trying desperately to quicken the pace of his brothers “work”. In Cody’s dream, he had gotten accustomed to his uncharacteristic domination over his brother. Thusly he quickly thwarted Zacks attempts to gain control by kicking his legs up into the air and spinning them around. His tongue rested against the length of his brothers shaft and his teeth were gently wrapped around the base. As his legs spun, his mouth wrapped around, his teeth and tongue swirling around every inch of his brother tool eliciting gasps of air and long moans from his brothers mouth.
Cody’s legs landed on either side of Zacks head, releasing Zacks grip on his brothers hair, and landing the brothers in a perfect 69 position. Cody quickly got back to work while Zack noticed Cody’s own 7 in. masterpiece and quickly took it into his mouth. Both brothers were now completely enthralled in the pleasure that they were giving and receiving. Cody was still imagining that he was on a beach, making sweet love with his brother in seclusion. Zack, on the other hand, found new pleasure in the fear of his mother waking to find her twin sons face-fucking each other . He could still hear his mothers snores emitting from the next room, his heart racing with each new moan that escaped their mouths.
Zack and Cody began to feel a strange feeling in their gut. They could feel the approach of a new feeling that neither was familiar with. They had no idea what the new sensation was, they just new that it was just starting and already it felt better than any other feeling they had ever experienced. Their pace quickened as they felt the benefits of their “work” on each other slowly be revealed. They felt the objects in their mouths grow slightly larger. Suddenly the tension building up in their gut exploded out in one giant blast of unsurpassed bliss. Their screams of pleasure were muffled by the cocks in their mouths. They felt the sensation of fluid poor in each others mouths and savored the salty taste and unusual texture. They sucked each others tools dry, savoring every drop of the nectar that escaped. Once the juices stopped flowing, and both tools were licked clean, Zack and Cody released there grasp on each others shaft.
Cody slowly corrected his position on the bed and and was embraced by the gentle hands of Zack. Zack slowly stroked his brothers stomach which nudged Cody back into reality. He began to feel sad that his dream was over until his eyes fluttered open to realize that his fantasy was actually a reality. He could hear that Zack was lightly gasping for air. He could still feel the taste of his brother in his mouth, and the most wonderful sensation between his legs. He felt Zacks wet cock pushing against his inner thigh before finally speaking. “Zack...” he said in sleepy, yet happy tone.
Zack quickly became aware that his brother was awake and said “hey, that was amazing. Do you feel as good as me?”
Cody was relieved that his brother wanted it as much as he did “I’m happy you enjoyed it.” A smirk grew on his face as he added “I’m sorry for kissing you again.”
Zack stifled a laugh before saying “That's OK. I think I’m starting to enjoy you little fantasies.”
Cody began laughing slightly before gently moving back, deeper into his brothers embrace “Think maybe we could do it again sometime when I’m, you know, awake.”
Zack wrapped his hands tighter around his brother, still gently stroking his brothers stomach “we have the entire vacation, there’s no way we’re stopping now.” he said then whispered into his brothers ear “besides, I’m guessing that you still have more you can teach me.”
Cody quickly said “yeah, I have much more to teach you,” a smile stretched across his face before saying, “and They do say that the best method of teaching is through demonstration.
Zack laughed at that remark “Is that so. Hey, you never told me how you feel about what we’ve done.”
Cody turned his head around and kissed Zack lightly on the lips. Then said “it was a dream come true.”
At that, Cody fell asleep in Zacks embrace. Zack continued to rub the flat stomach of his brother until he heard the gentle breathing of a person sleeping, then he joined his brother in blissful sleep.
(A/N: please R/R. If you hated it, please tell me what you hated about it and please give me feedback on how to make my writing better. Just a reminder, if your a flamer just back off, but constructive criticism never hurts. If you liked it, a little praise never hurt anyone either. And tell me if you want another chapter.)
(Saturday afternoon in Zack and Cody’s suite)
Zack and Cody had just come back from their latest adventure. They had attempted to find the lost treasure of Hot Pepper, which had been rumored to be resting in the hotel. Unfortunately, Hot Pepper’s only treasure was Muriel. After destroying another chunk of the hotel, They returned to their room on the 23rd floor to serve their sentence
Zack looked over at Cody and said “I can’t believe how mad mom and Mr. Moseby got.”
Cody turned to Zack, being pulled away from his thoughts, and gave a small smirk before saying innocently “Yeah it was only a small whole in the wall, and, on the upside, we started construction on the hotel bank that Mr. Moseby has been pining over.” Cody was trying to suppress his laughter.
Zack was now smiling from ear to ear “When you think about it, they should be thanking us instead of confining us to our room again.” with that last thought the smile faded from his face
Cody looked at Zacks distraught face and, in an attempt to cheer him up, said “What do you care, weren’t you just going to come up here to play that new video game that you got earlier today? By the time you divert your thoughts away from that game, our punishment will already be over.”
Cody was happy to see the smile on his brother’s face as he remembered the video game “Yeah that’s right,” Zack said, starting to agree with him. Then his face gave off a confused expression, then questioned “wait a second, are you insulting me?”
Cody was amused at how long it took his brother to catch onto the uptake. He was suppressing laughter, while trying to sound innocent while saying “No, of course not, would I ever insult you?”
Zack now had a grin on his face, he put his hands on his hips trying to strike a very authoritative pose “Of course you would,” he said, wagging his index finger at his brother “in a heart beat.”
Cody tried to look as though his mother was punishing him. He hadn’t had as much practice as his brother, so he failed to suppress his smile, but managed to lower his head and sound sad enough that he pulled it off. “Alright, it’s true, you caught me red handed.” he said, in as sad a tone as he could muster.
Zack mimicked the stern look that his mother gave him whenever he got in trouble to a tee. He continued to wag his finger at his brother and said sternly, but in a joking manner, “now go to your room, no dinner for you until you can behave yourself” he successfully got his voice to a pitch that resembled their mother’s. Suddenly both Zack and Cody burst into a fit of laughter. They crashed down to the floor and rolled around until they were gasping for air.
Soon Zacks short attention span took affect and, remembering his new video game, left Cody to sit on the sofa. He turned on the video game and began to play. He paid no attention to the shift on the sofa as Cody sat next to him. He could faintly here Cody giving suggestions on where to go and what to do. That soon stopped as Cody realized that Zack was to enthralled in his game to pay any attention to the advice he was giving. The room around Cody started to slip into obscurity as he began to daydream.
It was similar to the fantasy he had earlier. He was imagining that he had just accepted another award for the advancements in science that he was able to accomplish with the money he had gotten from Hot Pepper. Then he swooped a woman, at least 8 years older than him, off of her feet and into a kiss. Just then he felt a resistance from the person he was kissing. The woman’s face started to go out of focus and the face of his brother had taken its place. He then realized that it was happening again. He had leaned over his brother and was frenching him on the couch in their living room. He quickly pulled himself off and looked away, his face quickly turning a shade of red resembling that of a fire truck (red food analogy’s are so overrated)
Zack stared at his brother in disbelief. He wiped his mouth and tried to scrape the taste of his brother’s saliva off of his tongue. “Man you did again, and this time you used your tongue.” he said in a somewhat angry tone. But seeing his brother looking so embarrassed and upset, decided to try and cheer him up instead of put him down. “At least this time you didn’t drop me onto the floor afterwords and at least you did it in the privacy of our suite instead of in the lobby where all the new babes come in.” He saw his brothers mood start to shift for the better. As Cody’s eyes met to his brother’s face, Zack jokingly asked “Just what were you fantasizing about this time. It better have been something good to kiss me like that.”
Cody’s mood instantly transformed again and he began to lower his head “Sorry dude, I was just thinking about winning a prize for my scientific discoveries and ...” he started, but was quickly cut off
“That figures. You French me, and you don’t even have the decency to have a good story to go with it.” Cody gave his brother a “you didn’t let me finish” look, and Zack quickly shut up.
Cody continued to tell his story, “well it did end with this 20-year-old woman standing next to me, then I swooped her off of her feet in a self-congratulatory French kiss, but you already new that.” Cody lightened his tone at the end, smirking at his brother. He soon saw the “I’m not amused” look on his brother and quickly recovered with “And I said I was sorry.”
Zack decided to forgive his brother. “It’s ok dude, it was obviously an accident.” he said in a caring tone, then he shifted to a lighter mood and jokingly said “Just don’t let it happen again.”
(Later that night in Zack and Cody’s bedroom)
That night Cody lay asleep enthralled in the sweet embrace that is fantasy. Zack lay awake in his bed. He couldn’t get the kiss out of his mind. No one had ever kissed him that way before. He didn’t even know that his brother knew that you could kiss that way. Thoughts kept on running through his mind about how his little brother knew about such things. His thoughts drifted to what else his brother knew. Not to mention what else his brother could teach him.
His thoughts were interrupted by a shift of weight on his bed. He opened his eyes to see his reflection looking back at him. His brothers eyes were closed and his mouth was starting to pucker in preparation for a kiss. Zack decided to test the limits of his brothers knowledge. He sat back and and decided that the best way to find out how much his brother knew, was to experience the knowledge first hand.
Cody rested his left arm on Zacks right side and his right arm on Zacks left side. He placed both of his knees near his brothers left hip. He positioned his head so that it was just above his brothers head. He dropped his head a little lower and their lips connected. Zack could feel his brothers tongue press against his lips. He quickly gave clearance to the foreign object and allowed it to pass into his mouth. As he became more relaxed to the sensations, Zack forced his tongue through their connected lips and began to explore the inner workings of his brothers mouth. Zack was in heaven as he began to memorize every crevice of his brothers mouth and every sensation that he felt throughout his body.
(Cody’s dream)
Cody was on the beach, He was walking towards a person resting in the sand. He felt a sense of security and love around this person. He loomed over the persons face, their identity still masked in obscurity, and slowly lowered his head down into a kiss. Feeling over excited with the sensations running through his body as the passion between the two lovers advanced, Cody made a daring move and gently pushed his tongue to the entry way of his lovers mouth.
His lover graciously accepted the gift and opened his mouth to give entry. After several minutes, Cody felt the sensations of his partners tongue start to explore his own mouth. The passion between the two began to get more and more intense. The haze that blocked the identity of his lover began to clear away. He noticed a certain familiarity in his unnamed love. He began to see an image of Zack emerge from the haze. Cody began to fear the worst, he began to think that he had accidentally included Zack into his fantasy. He noticed that his brother had his eyes closed and was enjoying the make-out session very much. Then he noticed the fact that he was still on the beach and realized that this is what he really wanted. Cody comforted himself with the thought that this wasn’t reality, but was still fantasy.
(Back in Zack and Cody’s bedroom)
Cody moved his left leg over his brothers body so that he was directly over him. Zack was admiring how deep a sleeper his brother was, and how much he knew about lust despite any actual experience. Cody extended his legs back and wrapped his arms around his brothers body. Cody was now lying on top of Zack and intensifying his search of Zacks mouth. Zack had also wrapped his arms around his brother. Thinking how wonderful it was that they both were only wearing boxers and pajama pants. Their bare chests rubbed against each other, Their nipples began to get hard under the new activity.
Zack felt new shocks of pleasure run through his system under these new sensations. He also began to feel a pressure in his pants and a new foreign object begin to push against his legs, originating from his sleeping brothers pajama bottoms. Feeling more dangerous, he began to move his hands down his brothers back, Finally settling on his brothers butt. He lifted up the elastic of his brothers pants and boxers and pushed them down the length of his brothers legs. He could feel Cody follow suit. Soon they were both completely naked, there clothing wrapped around their respective ankles and the growth pushing against the fabric of their pants were now released and continually growing at a slow, but steady, rate.
Cody slowly cancelled the onslaught of his brothers mouth eliciting a moan from his brother. A smile stretched across his sleeping face, finding amusement in the new found power that his knowledge in this subject brought him. He moved his hands back to his brothers sides and began to trail kisses down the collarbone of his brothers neck. He could clearly hear the moans of his brother through his dreams as he slowly made his way down to his brothers, slightly toned, stomach and continued south until he reached his treasure. He kissed the head of his brothers 7 in. monster. Feeling that his brother, not to mention himself, had waited long enough, quickly took the length of his brothers cock into his mouth.
Zack quickly latched his hands into the matted fibers of his brothers, dirty blonde, hair, trying desperately to quicken the pace of his brothers “work”. In Cody’s dream, he had gotten accustomed to his uncharacteristic domination over his brother. Thusly he quickly thwarted Zacks attempts to gain control by kicking his legs up into the air and spinning them around. His tongue rested against the length of his brothers shaft and his teeth were gently wrapped around the base. As his legs spun, his mouth wrapped around, his teeth and tongue swirling around every inch of his brother tool eliciting gasps of air and long moans from his brothers mouth.
Cody’s legs landed on either side of Zacks head, releasing Zacks grip on his brothers hair, and landing the brothers in a perfect 69 position. Cody quickly got back to work while Zack noticed Cody’s own 7 in. masterpiece and quickly took it into his mouth. Both brothers were now completely enthralled in the pleasure that they were giving and receiving. Cody was still imagining that he was on a beach, making sweet love with his brother in seclusion. Zack, on the other hand, found new pleasure in the fear of his mother waking to find her twin sons face-fucking each other . He could still hear his mothers snores emitting from the next room, his heart racing with each new moan that escaped their mouths.
Zack and Cody began to feel a strange feeling in their gut. They could feel the approach of a new feeling that neither was familiar with. They had no idea what the new sensation was, they just new that it was just starting and already it felt better than any other feeling they had ever experienced. Their pace quickened as they felt the benefits of their “work” on each other slowly be revealed. They felt the objects in their mouths grow slightly larger. Suddenly the tension building up in their gut exploded out in one giant blast of unsurpassed bliss. Their screams of pleasure were muffled by the cocks in their mouths. They felt the sensation of fluid poor in each others mouths and savored the salty taste and unusual texture. They sucked each others tools dry, savoring every drop of the nectar that escaped. Once the juices stopped flowing, and both tools were licked clean, Zack and Cody released there grasp on each others shaft.
Cody slowly corrected his position on the bed and and was embraced by the gentle hands of Zack. Zack slowly stroked his brothers stomach which nudged Cody back into reality. He began to feel sad that his dream was over until his eyes fluttered open to realize that his fantasy was actually a reality. He could hear that Zack was lightly gasping for air. He could still feel the taste of his brother in his mouth, and the most wonderful sensation between his legs. He felt Zacks wet cock pushing against his inner thigh before finally speaking. “Zack...” he said in sleepy, yet happy tone.
Zack quickly became aware that his brother was awake and said “hey, that was amazing. Do you feel as good as me?”
Cody was relieved that his brother wanted it as much as he did “I’m happy you enjoyed it.” A smirk grew on his face as he added “I’m sorry for kissing you again.”
Zack stifled a laugh before saying “That's OK. I think I’m starting to enjoy you little fantasies.”
Cody began laughing slightly before gently moving back, deeper into his brothers embrace “Think maybe we could do it again sometime when I’m, you know, awake.”
Zack wrapped his hands tighter around his brother, still gently stroking his brothers stomach “we have the entire vacation, there’s no way we’re stopping now.” he said then whispered into his brothers ear “besides, I’m guessing that you still have more you can teach me.”
Cody quickly said “yeah, I have much more to teach you,” a smile stretched across his face before saying, “and They do say that the best method of teaching is through demonstration.
Zack laughed at that remark “Is that so. Hey, you never told me how you feel about what we’ve done.”
Cody turned his head around and kissed Zack lightly on the lips. Then said “it was a dream come true.”
At that, Cody fell asleep in Zacks embrace. Zack continued to rub the flat stomach of his brother until he heard the gentle breathing of a person sleeping, then he joined his brother in blissful sleep.
(A/N: please R/R. If you hated it, please tell me what you hated about it and please give me feedback on how to make my writing better. Just a reminder, if your a flamer just back off, but constructive criticism never hurts. If you liked it, a little praise never hurt anyone either. And tell me if you want another chapter.)