rate_review Reviews

I loved it! Bravo! Excellenitiniting, you're very good at writing this stuff...

very nice

Um... *scratches head*

You did get one thing right, I'm an inexperienced male (duh). If I'd ever had the real thing, why would I be writing about it? *smirk*

But you're missing the point of the story. Annie finding semen all over her daughter's panties would be a very bad thing if Lucy intended on staying at home. That's why she needed to continually clean up.

And, as for the squick-factor, what can I say? How damaged are you by reading something offense? Not very, I can imagine. So please let people with off-the-wall fetishes enjoy it the only way possible -- in the safe setting of a fantasy.

Somehow I can tell a man wrote this. I think it's the fact that you seem to think the clitoris somehow protects the vagina and that women somehow need to douche. Do you know about douching at all? Have you consulted an anatomy book ever? Douching is VERY BAD and the vagina is a self cleasing organ. I'd thank you not to refer to female genitals as "pipes" or anyof those ridiculous terms you've made up. Lucy's just been pretty much raped by Simon, he ejaculated in her body and she blows it off with a laugh. The motivations are all wrong here. The characters aren't real in the slightest. This tripe belongs with the other pedo fics on alt.sex.stories.

Damn, I like this one... I hope you can do more! :-)

Bravo! Very graphic and also a well written, awesome story! Hope you'll continue it, if not, then I hope to see more of your work in the future.