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Double D You misread JustOneReader’s post. He didn’t say you said you would stop reading. You defended someone else saying that as a legitimate criticism. You can agree or disagree with his critique. That’s fair. I happen to agree with him. You plainly don’t. But the second you call someone an idiot, whatever point you might make ends for me. JustOneReader is not an idiot. I’m not a moron. Using those incendiary words is a barrier to civilized discourse. It is chilling to the creative process. This is a site for adults. If I was standing in front of you, you sure wouldn’t use those words. Why should you use them is this forum? Because you’re protected by anonymity? That’s not a very good reason. So back to the point. If you have a criticism of this, or any other, story, make it. If I agree, I’ll say so. If I don’t, I’ll say so and defend my POV. But do it in a respectful, constructive way. I don’t anyone would object to that.

I never mentioned anyone by name in my original. But I think it applies to the first Anon, who posted a short (possibly wrong) critique and got put down by multiple people. It's more about this pervasive attitude that exists, on here in particular but also just in general and it's annoyingly destructive. I am glad that I kept my response fairly curt as I was wrong about your intentions so I'm sorry for that. But take out my first 3 or whatever sentences and I still think it's relevant. Most of JoeBob's posts in here just make me laugh though. Me using the word idiot sets you off, but you have no problem agreeing with the guy that calls people asses and d-bags and jackoffs. Oh, and trolls, but you were the first person to jump on that. You even said the word "Ridiculous" makes it a troll review. LOL. This is exactly the kind of stuff I'm talking about. When someone posts something that is unreasonably borderline flaming the author, the response should be to just report it and move on. Not to call out anybody posting criticism as trolls. That way things like this don't get rolling. From experience, I know that this works. The Mod Team is very good about handling this kind of stuff. Steve's comments were childish, sure, but hardly worthy of a soapbox.

The chapter is good, even if the idea (Sarah a sex slave) has seemingly become 95% of all Chuck stories on this site. One thing that makes me confused, I've never understood the idea that Sarah is so weak-willed that she'd just start falling for these guys and enjoy fucking these people against her will, it's borderline disrespectful to women and I hate the PC/femnazi environment we live in these days. Sarah is shown to be a very strong individual, yet writers on this site seem to break her and bring her down so quickly. This isn't focused at you specifically by the way, it's just a trend I've noticed lately. Anyway, overall a good start. Curious where you go from here.

I like the premis of the story. The problem that many people who try to explore this genre experience is that there are so many people who are so "pro Chuck/Sarah" that they destroy the experience for the rest of us. I'm sorry but I don't get excited for Chuck and Sarah together...it's cute, but not hot! Granted it's just one man's opinion, but the most popular stories on here tend to go non Chuck and Sarah pairing. The only way to really show your appreciation for a story is to review it and rate it, especially a non Chuck/Sarah pairing, because the haters out there tend to be ever vigilant against these types of stories. I find no point in seeing people review a story and saying "I'm not reading anymore" or "this is not for me" that type of review is for meaningless as it designates that the reviewer feels the author should write to suite the reviewer! It's not about the reviewer!!! I take reviews I get from other published authors on this site as invaluable, because those are the ones that at least open themselves up to the criticism. In my review of this story I would say that te author should go the way he or she wants to. Authors are giving us a free gift on here so let them express their opinions and story's!

Stating what you don't like and why you don't like it is far from trolling. Trying to label anything that disagrees with your view as "trolling" truly makes you look like a moron. That being said, I liked this. Prompt isn't too original, but then again it doesn't really need to be. I agree with the first reviewer that I definitely rolled my eyes at "something stirring within her" and her being "transfixed." That's just teenager-y nonsense. I have no problem with Sarah having sex with others, so don't brand me as one of those people. But it's certainly possible for her do to so (and for her to begrudingly enjoy the sex) without falling head over heels with an immoral jackass like some high-schooler. As long as that stuff is kept to a minimum, I can see myself enjoying this.

DoubleD, you're missing the point. Of course someone can say what they don't like. But words like ridiculous, crap, and moron make it trolling. I think anyone who would be so bold as to post a story here could accept some constructive criticism. But it should be done with respect for the effort that the author put in. It's that rude, obnoxious behavior by a very few that is killing this forum. So keep it up and we soon won't have anything to talk about. Works for me.

I hope u share ur intentions then we can get a better understanding of why u wrote it like that

MV007, I think it’s a writer’s job to paint a picture, and then allow the reader to see that picture with their own eyes and imagination. When I read this, the thing that popped into my mind is Phase Three. Sarah said she would do anything to find Chuck. If Phase Three had been a story on this site, the Thai Drug Lord would have demanded sex. To me, that’s a very interesting question. Would the Sarah of the show have given up sex to save Chuck’s life? We’ll never know. But I say yes. So here is the picture you’ve drawn for me so far. The Sarah Walker I see in my mind’s eye would hate this guy. She’d be looking forward to throwing a knife in his throat the second she could. Until then, she’s playing the sex slave role to get Chuck back. So the last thing she would notice is his pretty eyes. I can see Casey lusting after Sarah. Who wouldn’t? What I love about this story is that this guy is going slow. The temptation for a story on this site would be for him to rip her dress off, throw her over the loveseat, and fuck her brains out. But he seems to know what he’s doing. He wants to break her. That’s hot as hell. If the Sarah Walker I know is going to be broken, it would go slowly and take some time. So I hope the next thing is just a little more demanding, and then a little more. Maybe he’ll demand that she smile and pretend to enjoy it. And maybe she will even come to enjoy it. Maybe someday, she would notice his eyes, but not now. BTW, that’s exactly the same thing I would say to ItWasMerlin. I’d like to see Morgan demanding a little more slut-iness each time. As they break her will to resist. So I’m really enjoying this. I don’t think anything is ridiculous. It’s not crap. And you’re probably not a moron. I’m really looking forward to the next chapter.

the only person doubled called a moron was the guy trying to dismiss other people's views. Not the author. Nothing wrong w/ that review. The incorrect white knighting later on just makes you look like more of a martyr lol. I think the issues those ppl have critique you on aren't things that can be saved by an author's justification. Basically I don't think your intent as an author changes anything about those aspects of the story, at least with how they relate to chapter 1. Anyway directing namecalling toward an author is disrespectful and straying toward flaming but that really only happened in steves comment. This victimized mentality that people love to take is almost as bad as flaming itself.

What is it with people and their need for Sarah fucking every guy in sight. And as usual she's gonna fall for the guy even though he's a criminal. I mean he had beautiful green eyes and she was transfixed, and she felt something. I mean come on the guys a fucking criminal. Then I bet she somehow exchanges herself for chucks freedom so she can stay with him. Ridiculous.