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So Sarah is sexually attracted to lesoux?

I've got the feeling they already know who Sarah is They obviously kidnapped chuck for a reason and if they've been doing surveillance on him they will know who Sarah is And they know the only way Sarah could infiltrate them is by using sex And they would have fun breaking the cias best agent probably for her secrets.

DoubleD - chiming in only to say that you specifically hate the direction of the story and will not be participating is not constructive criticism or stating an opinion... It's grandstanding. MASKED as criticism. Or "my right to an opinion". You have a "right" to be an ass too, and many people can't help but exercise that right. Have your opinion. Fine. But explicitly stating that the potential audience for the story is now 7 billion MINUS ONE is fundamentally stupid. It's pretending that you are so important that if some readers come and go that's fine but you just had to announce your presence with authority and do a mic drop on the way out. Unfortunately, new writers still thickening their skin may take just that comment to heart. As an author (elsewhere), I can see over the course of a story whether readership has declined IN GENERAL. But expecting anyone to care about whether you will be participating is just being thirsty for attention. It is laughable and worthy of ridicule. "Oh, well if YOU don't like it I supposed I will reconsider everything..." Not gonna happen. As for "anonymous" droning on about white knighting and victimized mentality... I don't know who that was directed toward. "a" seemed to be taking both sides. But there's calling a spade a spade when d-bag behavior occurs or lobbying for a story you enjoy to continue. Calling it "white knighting" is just a way to excuse idiotic behavior. Steve acted "victimized" by the mere existence of this story. Vote with your feet (or mouse clicks on this case). This garbage occurs throughout fan fiction and you can only hope that a writer perseveres despite one or two self-important wieners trying to influence stories to their taste or "squeeze out" material not to their taste. I want more in this fandom (and others I frequent). And I want people trying to crush that to BE called out for the jag offs that they are. And I'll exercise my right to state THAT opinion whenever I see that behavior. Rant over. Now... Chapter 2, please?

The one thing I've never understood is the need , as a few have pointed out , is to state things like this is stupid, redicolous etc . It's fantasy people , I mean in my story i have Morgan/Sarah as the main 'couple' ( obviously not romantic) but it's the strange coupling's i enjoy , along with the strange situations and thats what i prefer to write , and definitely prefer to read when it comes to smut . The main thing I've noticed about when MVOO7 reviews my story , is that they enjoy the idea of Sarah and other men . And that's why in my opinion hes penned this story , because its something he enjoys and wants to write about . Some will like it , ie me , some wont . But if you don't why comment things like this will be more boring then watching paint dry etc? if your interested in Chuck/Sarah why not try MoreCharahPlease's story just a game ( Amazing btw) or another story , You can clearly see from Author's descriptions what the story will have . Offering constructive criticism is different aslong as it's not just trying to shoe horn your own beliefs about how the story should go in . I mean i remember putting in my story at the end of Sarah and Morgan;s first time that she had slightly enjoyed being used and people jumped down my throat about it . So before you type , remember there is someone on the other side of the screen who wrote the story for free , in hopes people would enjoy it , most of us finding writing something of a release from every day life and a bit of fun. So try to criticize constructively to help , not just because something happened you dont like . And keep writing MVOO7 , this is a good start ..... lets keep non charah alive haha Merlin

I hate the term ‘Crazy Shipper.’ But even if you are one, I don’t see why that disqualifies these stories. In this story, Sarah is going undercover as a sex slave to find and rescue Chuck. In ItWasMerlin’s story, she is submitting to Morgan to protect Chuck. You have to accept the premise to enjoy the story. But once you do accept it, it’s not anti-charah. I’d argue the opposite. In both cases, I believe she hates the Mark. Someone said earlier that Sarah is a very strong person. I agree with that. Having her ‘enjoy’ or look forward to being forced into sex would be a turn off to me. But I could see the purely physical response that ItWasMerlin has her feel. That’s believable to me. Here it would be interesting if the mark secretly knew Sarah was an agent. I would love to see that battle of wills. The mark is trying to break an agent. The strong willed agent is playing a role to rescue the man she loves. Who wins that battle? Being a Sarah Walker fan, I would hope that she would. But I could also see the mark winning, or, at least, appear to for a while.

@JoeBob It isn't the concept of Sarah being a sex slave, and it isn't the concept of Sarah protecting Chuck. I accept both premises, it's the execution that has me rolling my eyes. It's when authors turn Sarah into this sex slave under the guise of 'protecting' Chuck and yet clearlyyyy show her enjoy the sex and find the person who is fucking her (apparently against her will under the mentality of it being 'for' Chuck) attractive and a good fuck. I don't get why people try to keep realism (give Sarah a reason to fuck these people) but yet throw it out the window straight away because of how she views these people that are essentially raping her. It makes her look like a slut, it makes her look weak. None of those can be true at the same time as her 'protecting Chuck', it just doesn't work that way. That's why it is anti-charah to me, because the motivation of Sarah doesn't hold up to any sort of reality, not when she enjoys it in 20 minutes of the stranger having his dick down her throat or in her hand. I also disagree when you say 'i believe she hates the mark'. There is no way this version of Sarah hates the mark in the first chapter of 'The Exchange', it just doesn't read that way at all. Merlin made Sarah an idiot (in terms of how she is being blackmailed), but he's kept her 'feelings' toward Morgan sincere, this story hasn't done that so far. "But I could see the purely physical response that ItWasMerlin has her feel. That’s believable to me. " = It isn't believable at all, not if you believe her reason for doing it, her entire reason for 'going through this' is to find/protect Chuck. Sarah isn't protecting Chuck in Merlin's story for starters, she's fucking Morgan because she doesn't want her original lie to come out, it's selfish and pathetic from her. She's protecting herself. This story does have the Chuck protection angle, but the quickness of which she is enjoying this and finds the person attractive, doesn't coincide with the rationale with her doing this. So in essence, my problem isn't with the idea of Sarah as a sex slave, it's the WTF nature of having her believe that it's "for Chuck" when the audience clearly sees she is full of shit. In Merlin's story she doesn't do the right thing, her fucking Morgan is inexcusable. In this story, her doing this is "for" Chuck's protection, but her enjoying it/finding the guy attractive makes it no longer be about finding Chuck, thus invalidating the whole plot. Both stories are very well written, and I enjoy reading them. But to suggest the plot makes any sense, or Sarah's actions/feelings are realistic in any way.....is completely idiotic to me. Looking forward to reading chapter 2 :)

@Anon. Huh? She enjoyed the sex? What sex? There hasn't been any sex yet. She noticed that he had pretty eyes. I think you're getting way ahead of where this story is. Let's wait and see where the author takes this. If what you're fearing happens, if Sarah enjoys this without some serious explanation, you might have a legitimate OOC complaint. But fearing that it will happen isn't legitimate. Be fair to the author and let him tell his story. If you feel it's OOC, say so. As long as you do that constructively, I have no issue. Sarah allowing Morgan to blackmail her into a sexual relationship requires some suspension of disbelief. I don't know ItWasMerlin. But I think he would be the first to agree. Most stories do. I mean the show is about a guy who loads a computer in his head, lol. I would say that the bar for realism is lower on this site than many others. Wouldn't you agree? But once I accept that idea, I'm enjoying the story a lot. In fact, I'd say that the Sarah of that story is very believable. She hates Morgan. She even hates herself because she gets an involuntary thrill sometimes. If I wasn't enjoying it, I'd stop reading and move on.

@ last anon review I agree with you 100% on everything you said This Sarah is supposedly doing this to find chuck but she was getting wet at the thought of fucking other men before she even left for the assignment As you say these men are going to be technically raping her but yet she's gonna enjoy it straight away just cause she finds the man attractive There's no point in giving her a credible excuse to fuck other men then completely make it unbelievable as soon as the smut starts As for your views on the itwasmerlin story I agree as well She says this is for chuck but it's not its for her own selfish fucking reasons that's she's fucking he best friend I also find that inexcusable

"DoubleD - chiming in only to say that you specifically hate the direction of the story and will not be participating is not constructive criticism or stating an opinion" Don't be an idiot. I never said I wouldn't be reading. If you'd bothered to read to the end of my post, I specifically ended it with, "I can see myself enjoying this." The rest of your response is just warped bullshit stemming from that. The lowercase anon is mostly right. People like you are really no different from people like Steve. Bashing others because they think differently from you. There have been several posts in here offering legitimate criticism (Steve notwithstanding). Nobody has said "this is all bad writing" or even "please stop this story". Posting your thoughts isn't "d-bag behavior" or "trying to bend the story" or whatever other argument you wanna make up. It's posting your thoughts. I don't know why so many people immediately jump to an author's defense by attacking people that post things they don't like about the story. Why not just reaffirm how much you enjoy it instead? Certainly that's more constructive, especially to an author. At least it is for me.

2D - my comments were about the same person that your comments were about NOT YOU As for the whole "idiot" thing. Since it stems from your misinterpretation of the whole damn thing. What fucking ever. I still say one person saying "I'm out" is grandstanding and they should be called out for it.