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Hmm, so either beckman has been in on it from the beginning or the deal she made somehow involves giving Sarah to these men whenever they want Sarah. Or as the other reviewers said she has blackmail against Sarah. Not sure I like that option, getting betrayed by your superiors just so they can use her even more, it's pretty disgusting.

I think the sharp drop off in reviews, hits and general attention tells you more about the gradual decline in quality and interest of this story as the chapters have gone along than any 5000 word review I could type up. I think you're talented, especially when it comes to smut and dirty talk. You seem to have a decent grasp of how characters behave and how the story operates WITHIN a sex scene itself. The problem is that when you step outside of that absolutely EVERYTHING falls apart, and extremely so. If you don't treat your plots seriously and have them make some semblance of sense, nobody is ever going to care. At this point we might as well be reading a series of separate one shots over and over describing different sex scenes in different universes. Which is nice, but.... not what you're trying to deliver at all.

It's hilarious how you have Sarah pause for a minute to see how attractive the guy is, the guy who is about to rape her. Do you hate women?

I'm actually monitoring your story's hits too. Charts, spreadsheets... Or not.

I get the feeling beckman was in on this from the very start and will use the tapes to blackmail Sarah. Just wondering how many chapters u plan on writing for this story

Don't stop! Keep going!

Fucking hot.

I see your using the same excuse as itwasmerlin and that Sarah is doing this 'for chuck' lol whatever you say. First off Sarah/casey together eww I think I just threw up in my mouth a bit. Is Sarah going to be attracted to/turned on by every male in this story? Does she actually even care about chuck? I can't see that she does. She hasn't shown any guilt or regret for what she's done so far. Even when she first meant of the assignment the only thing she felt was excitement at the though of being used/fucked by other men. This doesn't actually paint her in a very good light does it? Why is she not protected from possible pregnancies? She knew what she was going to have to do with other men. Did she not think of the repercussions or was she to turned on by lesaux that she didn't care? She didn't think billings and co was going to where condoms did she? And what the fuck is up with casey? Yeah Sarah walker is hot as fuck and any man would love to have a go of her. But why is he acting like a schoolboy whose never had sex before it's pathetic. Does he not care about chuck at all? Chuck is one of his best friends and all casey is doing is acting all creepy and trying to get in his girlfriends pants. I was intimacy excited when I seen this story pop up thinking it had potential to be great. But after only 4 chapters it seems pretty ridiculous in places due to all the holes in the plot and how occ your characters are acting.

This has gotten so cringeworthy so fast. The villains are cartoonish and Casey/Sarah are meek little puppets. I'm struggling here to really stay as constructive as possible. Instead of actually showing some agency, their response is to do exactly as the bad guys tell them to. When has that EVER worked (particularly in the show)? Is it hot? Very much so, and while that's probably the most important part of any story on here..... man, it's not enough. Maybe this was all your intent, but it really has become laughable, at least whenever you aren't invested in an erotic scene. I'm still paying attention for now, but much in the way you look at a car crash. Oh, you also just had Sarah willingly cheat on Chuck. I personally don't care, but it's worth pointing out for this reason. Aside from that being quite a bit OoC (I would argue under any circumstance), I'm guessing you'll also incur the wrath of the Chuck/Sarah zealots that patrol these parts. Hope your reviews don't get spammed again.

Well, it is just my opinion, but Casey/Sarah dynamics just does not do it for me. I have read a few stories of them fucking but no matter how dirty they were, it always seemed plain vanilla. Don't get me wrong, I love Chuck and Sarah together, but I also think their sex stories are vanilla. Her getting banged by Lesoux or Billings or any other OMC would have been more hot. Sarah getting banged by OMC or characters like Morgan, Lester, Jeff, Manoush, I find hot(but I have rarely read stories starring them). Maybe it is because Yvonne is insanely hot and guys who played these characters are plain average, I find the idea of a hot character banging an average Joe as hot. But, it is just my opinion. You are the author and you know the best. Kudos on your effort in writing a Sarah smut story. I hope one day you will write a Sarah story that has her banging the loser characters of Chuck like Jeff or Lester.