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Saw your authors note on your new story. Please don't get discouraged because of a few bad reviews. People who don't leave legitamate constructive reviews shouldn't just post they don't like the story. If there is some specific element of the writing that could be improved then mention it, but there is no value in just bashing the story as a whole. If you don't enjoy it don't read it. That being said I literally check every day to see if a new chapter is up. The story is very enjoyable to read and is a solid mix of plot and sex scenes. Keep up the good work.

Notice your hits and reviews have gone down. Probably because people got tired of your whining and complaining at the beginning of each chapter because you can't take criticism. I wouldn't be surprised if people stopped reading altogether. The way Sarah is using Chuck is really gross. I'd slap her by now. You should just stop writing it because nobody cares about your protagonist.

I liked this. On the show, they played Sarah's fear of commitment twice. First in Season Three when she struggled to say ILY. Then again is Season four. That seemed one time too many to me. I think you're taking Sarah at pretty much the right speed. Of course, we'd like to see her have that epiphany moment where is realizes she is in love. But that would be the climax and basically the end of the story. So I'm trying to be patient... like i hope Chuck is. :) One thing I'm not patient about are the trolls here. Please don't allow one or two jerks to discourage you. In fact, I say delete the HA review. You're doing great.

Thank you for the quick update! The progression in their sexual exploits is great. So is their relationship growth. I'm enjoying this story so much. Thank you! Look forward to more please!

Wow! Good chapter! So apparently Sarah's "interrogation" inadvertently fed one of Chuck's fantasies. Nice twist! Also Sarah's walls are dropping more and more which is really cool to see happen. On a more sinister note, I'm starting to get the feeling that Carina's mother's boyfriend may have assaulted Sarah as a child. This would explain so much as to why she's as guarded as she is and why she admits to herself that there's a huge hole that needs filled inside of her. I really enjoy your writing style, keep up the good work!

Nice to see Sarah become more aware of the connection her and Chuck share together, my fingers are crossed she doesn't get scared and distance herself/run away from him again

Superb chapter. Amazingly hot sex, and some real heartfelt conversations that seems to bond them together even more. Seems Sarah's walls are crashing down now, hopefully we see them get even closer soon. Can't wait for more.

Really really really love this story so much. I've gone through it a few times now and it gets better every time. I really like that they both go headfirst into each sex session. Still using their physical talents to unwind and get rid of tension in this very tense situation. And I love that Sarah's officially put Chuck's safety above her job, when she never would have done that for anyone else before. That says a lot more to me than her actually telling him "I love you". And I think that's what you're going for......at least for right now. And Chuck knew exactly what he was getting into when she started riding him, trying to get him to tell the truth about whether or not he was a hacker. My guess is that it's something he's subconsciously wanted to tell her. She really didn't have to push very hard to get him to talk. And he did have the upper hand for a bit there. He was just as much in control as she was. I'm not sure that this scene and Sarah's tactics are as simple as some of the reviewers before me are making it. I saw it as give and take from both sides. Anyways, this is so good. Can't wait for more!

Sarcasm. It's a thing. I'm pretty sure Sarah doesn't use sex to get information out of suspects or witnesses because that's illegal. She was being sarcastic when she said she doesn't TYPICALLY...hence the italics. And both Chuck and Sarah were equally into the sex. She wasn't using him to get information. They were having sex. He took control a few times, even fought back a little. It was hot argument sex. But whatever. I think MCP has made it pretty clear they're writing what they're gonna write whether the readers like it or not. I happen to think this chapter and all the ones before it were great and if it's really that deplorable to you, good luck reading the other stories on this site. Because thi is easily the best one. And least offensive. With the best char. development.

Firstly she didn't say anything, it was an inner-thought. Secondly your claims of 'sarcasm' are not clear at all, it doesn't read that way. It was a thought mid-sex, it's more likely poorly written/worded than it is Sarah being sarcastic. That or a bad attempt at humor. Third, she was CLEARLY using sex as a method to get Chuck to tell the 'truth' while he was otherwise occupied. It doesn't matter what Chuck thinks/does during the act, he is enjoying the act for what it is, he has no clear concept to why Sarah is asking the questions until the end when she starts grilling him for answers, I mean he even gets somewhat angry at the end. So yes, the 'typically' was poorly written, and probably not intended. But it is suggestive, regardless of what you say. Chuck 'taking control' is irrelevant, Sarah was leading the conversation/interrogation. The actual sex isn't the issue, it's the fact that Sarah was using that sex to get information out of Chuck he otherwise wouldn't say. That's the problem. It's pretty weird for Sarah to do that after MCP spent half the chapter showing how much Sarah cares for Chuck. A person who cares for him wouldn't use something that is meant to be meaningful to obtain information, keeping in mind she is thinking of it as an interrogation during the act (hence the 'typically' part). I didn't have a huge problem with the chapter overall, but in my mind...Sarah 100% used sex to get Chuck to confess, it's pretty disgusting too, given their 'relationship'.