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YES!!! I've been checking this almost every day for the last few months, so I'm very keen for the next chapter in a few days :D I'm sure some of the people reading, like me, will like it no matter what Merlin.

Hellooooooooooo

Sampled the milk when can I buy the cow

Thanks for the teaser / sample Merlin! Glad you're still working on it and looking forward to reading what you've cooked up.

Sarah mindset/attitude is pretty simple, you don't make her look forward to it at all, you make her hate herself after it happens. The torn feelings are there when you have her enjoy it while it is going on, and feel bad with herself once it is over. I think if you make her look forward to it and/or miss it....then the whole blackmail angle is gone and it's just straight up cheating.

just a small update ....im up to 13'500 know so it's slowly getting there .Im not rewritting parts either so thats a plus , the main thing im struggling with is thought process etc of Sarah especially . After all Morgan's ego is basically based on the way he was when he got the intersect , he is also consumed by lust and having power . This chapter could be split into three at this rate . Here's where im currently up to. 'As his fingers continued to slip in and out of the stunning blonde, the bearded man could feel his cock throbbing almost painfully, he needed to be inside her. It had been a few days ….too long in his mind to have not savored the feeling of being inside her unbelievably sweet pussy. He wanted her mouth again, he wanted to eat her out again ….. He wanted to sample her unbelievable ass. But he had the whole day for that, but right now his cock was begging to be buried inside the pussy his fingers where currently knuckle deep in.' hope to update soon ... Merlin

I'm not sure I'm gonna like where your going to go with Sarah's thought process to be honest. Your probably gonna make it so she's missed being fucked by Morgan for a couple of days. I know she hates that she has to do that with Morgan, but she enjoys the submissive part. So in the few days since they last fucked, she's probably made love to chuck numerous times, and she's realised now that she enjoys being used more then her connection of love making with chuck. I don't mind that she secretly enjoys the physical side of things with Morgan, but I am worried that she will enjoy her time with Morgan rather then her time with chuck. That's what every author on here tends to do. Will she openly express her enjoyment more in further chapters? For eg moaning more and begging for more without being told to? Orgasms and such? Hopefully not. I hope she continues as she is, enjoying it but trying to make it look like she doesn't.

I know and I hope it publishes it , but there's some stories on here that get a lot of flack as people can't take Sarah and someone else .

In all honesty it doesn't suprise me the author hasn't updated. Some people on this site can't take anything but Chuck/Sarah and probably wouldn't in a million years be able to take the idea of Sarah getting any pleasure from Morgan . I'm not one of them , I love this story and think the thought process and Sarah's denial of any enjoyment is HOT . Plus the ugly/beautiful fucking each other aspect aswell . Please update soon Merlin .

He has 10000 words written and this story has its own controversy when it was published