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for The Blackmail of Sarah Walker

by ItwasMerlin

person It was merlin
schedule May 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Just an update so people don't think I'm doing a long disappearing act again. The seduction chapter is nearly complete but will have to be split into three parts . Just curious if you want part one asap or not? Plus would love to hear any of your thoughts. Thank you
person Guest
schedule May 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Since you have the whole "seduction" part almost written, why not upload the three parts at one go. The readers can then read the particular arc at one go.
person Reyes
schedule May 19, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Great set-up chapter for the next one, really looking forward to how it's gonna go down now. Hope u update sooner as your writing is great.
schedule May 18, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Enjoying the story so far. Like I said I'm not a huge fan of Chuck being portrayed as the oblivious victim but it's smut so who cares as long as Sarah's hot lol. But by the end of the story Chuck should definitely find out and get revenge. Maybe tranqing Sarah and Morgan, tying them up and making them watch him and Alex, and maybe Carina and Zondra too.

Also I've always had a story I wanted to see. It was a prompt I saw awhile back and it's based on the season four episode Masquerade. It would involve odd pairings so I think you may like to write it so here it is if your interested.

Chuck thinks the party they are at could be an orgy party (Chuck vs the Masquerade). He's right. Chuck/Sarah/Multiple others male&female orgy, party, group sex, exhibitionism, voyeurism, double penetration, gangbang

person Ideas
schedule May 17, 2015 at 12:00 AM
My personal hope is that you don't make Sarah enjoy any of this, it's one thing to be blackmailed into performing sex acts, it's another for her to want to do it, to enjoy it.... At that point the story loses it's premise, it will become about just Sarah cheating on Chuck.

As for ideas, the forcing Sarah to seduce Morgan like a mark is a great idea because it forces Sarah to pretend she wants him (it should only ever be pretend).

I think you should make Morgan selfish about it (at least for a while) only worry about his own pleasure, be rough, face fuck her etc, taunt her about how much better he is than Chuck, make it as horrible as possible for her. I think the interesting part is how Morgan tries to control her, he needs to keep pushing the limits like you made him do in the car when he put his hand on her head.

You could make him test the limits by having her do things that she doesn't want to do, take a load in the face, make her show him his cum in her mouth, fuck her in front of a mirror, make her watch it, make her watch the video of her sucking his cock. She doesn't want to remember it, you should get him doing and saying things to taunt that. Morgan could force her to fuck him in Chuck and Sarah's bed while he is out, Morgan could force Sarah to be on the phone with Chuck whilst he is railing her from behind, trying to get her to make noises.

I think there is a lot you can do with this story, I think you should just take it slow and remember that Sarah doesn't want to do this, Morgan knows that, so make him do his best to keep letting her know that, keep doing degrading things to her

person BigFan
schedule May 16, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Love this story and need more! I'm hoping Morgan becomes more domineering and gets a little rougher with Sarah (she of course feeling guilty and disgusted with herself for liking it). And I agree with the previous comment. Hopefully Sarah becomes Morgan's sex slave and Morgan pimps her out to the buymorons and Casey and who-the-hell-ever lol. Those are the scenarios I want. Please make it happen!
person Anon
schedule May 16, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I think like one of the other comments said, once morgan has fucked her he should use her to fuck others, best example being using sarah's spy skills to blackmail and trap ellie into doing the same for him. Can't wait for chapter three :D
person Anon
schedule May 16, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Morgan should definitely fuck her but this all started because he found out she slept with a mark. He should make her seduce him. Make him believe it. And of course get it on tape.

"Big" Mike could catch her fucking Morgan at his mother's house and get a turn whenever he wants. Keeps sending Chuck off on installs and she has to fuck him in his office. Maybe send Chuck for training and have a Buy More party.

Then Morgan should make a little money off of her. Street walking or maybe as "party entertainment" with lots of serious gangbangs. Always there with a camera (working girls often have "security" with them and he should insist he get to watch).

Any lesbian action with Carina or Ellie is always awesome but it's hard to see Carina falling for the blackmail. Maybe she comes back to town to hook up with Morgan and he asks if she'd be up for something with another girl and she's lukewarm to it until she finds out its Sarah (who she's always wanted). Carina with a strap on (vaginal, I don't understand lesbian anal) while Morgan spit roasts her or Morgan fucks Carina while Carina fucks Sarah.

Carina being in on the exploitation after that would be fun too. Then strap on anal as humiliation / training. Especially if it ends up with Carina / Ellie / Sarah.

Maybe Carina makes Sarah troll lesbian pickup joints for "playmates" and (surprise, surprise) a hesitant Ellie is there hoping to experiment?

Maybe they all get Alex involved too? (Or Alex leaves Morgan over it and eventually ends up with Chuck!) Casey could have his turn with Sarah once he's disgusted by the whole thing.

I hope Chuck doesn't find out for a long, long time but by the time he does she's such a sex addicted fuck slave she really doesn't care (or at least not enough to stop).

Just a few ideas but I was so pleased to read that you are continuing I thought I'd throw a few in there.
person mv007
schedule May 15, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I was glad to hear that you were continuing this story. I absolutely love this. When it comes to the more adult fan fiction, I find that I enjoy the kinkier stuff more. As for story ideas. There is obviously so much more to go for Morgan and Sarah. Having vaginal or anal sex seem like the obvious next steps. What I would love to see is maybe incorporating more characters. Maybe Morgan blackmails Sarah into servicing Casey or one of the buy morons finding Morgan/Sarah and wanting in on the action. Or Morgan getting Sarah to get Carina or Ellie involved.
person It was merlin
schedule May 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hello readers , just so you know I will continue this story . I have been very busy lately and also have a few of my other stories I'm working on so im not sure when I'll update. Please leave a review if you have any situations you would like to see . Between Morgan and Sarah. Just fyi I am a Chuck/Sarah fan but that does not mean I would write a porn fic about them as I find weird pairings more interesting when it comes to that . IF I was to do a Chuck/Sarah story , it wouldnt be a smutty one like this. As to the question that keeps coming up about Chuck finding out , all I'll say is who knows , but if he does it wouldn't be for ages because well , then it wouldn't be a very long story would it