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Chapter 6 was great! I loved that Morgan finally got rough with her and got exactly what he wanted from her as opposed to chapter 5 where they're both playing roles.

Also really glad that you're going to include Ellie (since before Sarah Ellie was another woman he wanted to fuck like nothing else but she would have no interest in him) I don't think including Jill really makes any sense, but any way to bring Alex in would be pretty hot.

I also agree with the reviewers that said Jeff and Lester somehow getting in on the action would be hot. I think soon you should stop having all of the sex scenes in hotel rooms and maybe have Morgan make Sarah fuck him in places where they have a chance of being caught (Buy More, Castle, The apartment, the orange orange etc.)

That's my 2 cents, glad you're continuing the story.

Loved it! You are really doing a great job here, and I'm happy to hear that you're continuing to write what you want to write because in the end, its your story anyways lol. With that being said I do have some thoughts that I would like to address. Take them to heart, ignore them, that's up to you.

- I'm loving Morgan becoming more rougher with Sarah. I do hope he pulls her hair and spanks her a lot MORE while riding her doggystle. Definitely a hot scene! Pretty please! Oh, more dirty names would be nice too.

- I'm not to sure about Ellie. Although that particular threesome would be hot, I don't see it working. I mean how on Earth is Ellie going to get in on this without telling Devon or Chuck? If Sarah pleaded with Ellie I'm sure Ellie would choose Chuck over Sarah and tell her little brother to kick Sarah and Organ to the curb. So although I'm not a big fan of this eventual threesome pairing, it will be interesting to see what you can cook up.

- Adding Carina is a must for me. Jill is whatever. Hmmm maybe even Agent Forrest? I don't think Alex should be included which connects to my next point...

- I know this has been said like a million times already, and I know you already addressed it. I just want to repeat it so you keep it in mind and don't forget lol. The reason I don't want Alex involved is because I want Morgan to be head over heels for Alex and Chuck making Alex into his own personal fucktoy. I desperately need Chuck to come out on top, no pun intended. Chuck is my favorite character, so I need him to be the person winning by the end of this story. Of course take your time with that and make this story like 100 chapters long if you'd like lol. I know I'd love that. But in the end please remember to make Chuck the biggest winner in all this.

- Again I know you addressed this, I'm just repeating this for a reminder. I like that Sarah is getting pleasure out of being treated like a whore. I do not however want Sarah to ever fall for Morgan or crave him. I'm OK with her craving the sex act itself of being treated like a cumdoll, but I don't want her looking forward to ditching Chuck to meet up with Morgan. SO yeah, Sarah liking the rough sex, yes please, Sarah liking Morgan, hell no please!

- I've been suggesting this so I'll suggest it again lol. Morgan need to pimp out Sarah...to the Buymorons preferably.

Love your story. Please continue writing how you want to write. I do hope my thoughts help though. Also if you can just assure me Chuck will be winning at the end one more time I'd be grateful lol.

not sure how you are going to make ellie become involved unless you have sarah seducing her one night after theyve been drinking, surely she would side with chuck over anyone else and not cover up sarahs cheating. ellie was one person who i hoped wouldnt be involved because everyone else is betraying chuck it would be nice if someone he cares about actually stood up for him and the fact shes a married woman, so if sarah somehow forces ellie into it and chuck and devon find out, well lets just say sarah wouldnt be welcome at casa woodcombe anymore.

hopefully you dont have sarah become addicted to morgan. enjoying the rough sex is one thing but actually liking morgan and forgetting about chuck i hope that doesnt happen. and i hope you have a good ending planned for chuck and a bad ending for anyone who betrays him in this story.

I think an idea that could work is that Morgan demands that Sarah set up a M/M/F threesome with Chuck (and Morgan of course). And during the act Morgan treats her like a slut and she (either pretending or not) loves it. That would go VERY far with the mind games if she has to act interested in him in front of Chuck. But something like DP when Chuck hasn't ever gotten anal with her would be especially humiliating to her as well I'd think, especially if she liked it. Chuck could always demand a MFF threesome in return and that end up turning into a foursome with Morgan involved; I dunno, that's a more "out there" idea.

Hello everyone, thank you for the reviews I've received for the last chapter. Chuck for the time being will be more background until nearer for the end where he will come out good. Just have to remember this stories only taken place over a week or more .Carina is 100% in it as I've actually set the ground work for her arrival, Sarah's excuses etc Ellie I want in it , just because like one reviewer said he lusted for her for years . It's just trying to work the situation out , maybe blackmail or something.

Still would love any suggestions to the questions I aasked at the bottom of the chapter. It does help .

Thanks

Merlin

Yeah, I get why people can dislike this but then, DON'T READ IT. It's trash, smut, all that. It's dirty and I enjoy it. Glad you continued this, brah. Looking forward to more.

Read chap 5, quite hot. Could go a bit more into descriptions during sex; how stretched Sarah feels, the hair on Morgan's body (probably a hairy troll), etc. I liked seeing her dominated. Just cuz you write this fic, don't feel you need to defend yourself as a fan of Chuck. This is just a nasty fantasy, feel free to enjoy it. Looking forward to more domination of Sarah.

Chapter was ok, the premise is essentially over, and you make Chuck look completely pathetic, but the sex is solid

Chap 6, very nice, good descriptions. Looking forward to the eventual anal, that will really break Sarah down. I like the direction this is going, just don't become too distracted with other characters.

Glad to see u back. Loved this chapter looking forward to the anal scene.wouldn't worry about adding to many more characters but carina would definitely be a good choice