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July 15, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This is a cute romance and the plot with Lucifer is inventive and interesting. I have just one hopefully constructive criticism: when writing dialogue the words each character says should be on the same line with whatever action or other commentary goes along with those words. One line/paragraph per character. You seem to alternate, one character's words with a different character's actions, which can be confusing. Switch lines/paragraphs only when the character doing the action and/or saying the words changes. I hope that makes sense. Overall I'm really enjoying this story and the many plot twists you've incorporated.
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July 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I just got done with this excellent story. I really hope there is a sequel to this story. I really enjoyed how Cas and Dean are socte together.