rate_review Reviews

I really like the second person POV or is it tense? The way you blend a characters movement with speech is great, although confusing in some parts. You try too hard to get across how much she loves Dean. Her confessional monologues both inner and outer get a bit sappy and needy. Deans too. It is a little strange having the "you" in parts of the story where the reader is not present, but I'm not sure that it's wrong. I think you've maintained good characterization, manners, dialogue etc aside from a little sappiness on Deans inner monologues. I've enjoyed reading this unique perspective and hope to see more. Thank you for writing and posting.

I really enjoyed this story and I really enjoyed how well I was able to emirs myself in the story.

I love this story!! I can't wait to read more!!

Me and my friends love this... Please write more soon!!!