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January 29, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 23: Pretty good chapter. I do enjoy a good lesbian gangbang. But it was strange that there was no reaction from Aria & Spencer at Hanna's mom & Jenna being part of the A-Team. Especially the bit of news that Ashley likes to fuck her daughter should've gotten more of a response. That seems a lot more shocking than Mona being part of the A-Team.
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June 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 22: A wonderfully depraved sex romp.
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December 16, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 21: It's touching to read how nicely Aria and Spencer share each other's slut. :P Hot chapter.
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July 8, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Good to see Ashley finally making her spoiled gorgeous daughter her bitch.
A bit too focussed on extreme anal perhaps, but still a very hot read.
It would be wise to beta read more carefully before posting the chapter.
Here you posted the same paragraph twice.
"I have enough friends, thank you." Ashley said dismissively, opening her mouth to transition the conversation back to what was important.
Unfortunately she was rudely interrupted by Mona, "Really? Because according to the cameras I set up around your home you don't have that many, especially not close friends. That's one of the things we have in common. I have a lot of people I call friends, but I don't even trust the ones closest to me with all my secrets. In fact they're probably the least trustworthy, but they are a means to an end. An end I have now finally achieved, more or less. I just need to take care of any lingering complications, like Spencer and Aria. And you."
There was a pause in the conversation, allowing Ashley to digest this information, the redhead becoming pale and gulping, "Cameras?"
Unfortunately she was rudely interrupted by Mona, "Really? Because according to the cameras I set up around your home you don't have that many, especially not close friends. That's one of the things we have in common. I have a lot of people I call friends, but I don't even trust the ones closest to me with all my secrets. In fact they're probably the least trustworthy, but they are a means to an end. An end I have now finally achieved, more or less. I just need to take care of any lingering complications, like Spencer and Aria. And you."
Ashley blinked a few times, too shocked to be angry, and then murmured, "You bitch."
I'm enjoying this series quite a lot. Interesting development to have Ashley join the A team. Not sure I liked her being somewhat submissive to Mona, but thinking about it, it's probably in character for her. Ashley has never been particularly domineering.
A bit too focussed on extreme anal perhaps, but still a very hot read.
It would be wise to beta read more carefully before posting the chapter.
Here you posted the same paragraph twice.
"I have enough friends, thank you." Ashley said dismissively, opening her mouth to transition the conversation back to what was important.
Unfortunately she was rudely interrupted by Mona, "Really? Because according to the cameras I set up around your home you don't have that many, especially not close friends. That's one of the things we have in common. I have a lot of people I call friends, but I don't even trust the ones closest to me with all my secrets. In fact they're probably the least trustworthy, but they are a means to an end. An end I have now finally achieved, more or less. I just need to take care of any lingering complications, like Spencer and Aria. And you."
There was a pause in the conversation, allowing Ashley to digest this information, the redhead becoming pale and gulping, "Cameras?"
Unfortunately she was rudely interrupted by Mona, "Really? Because according to the cameras I set up around your home you don't have that many, especially not close friends. That's one of the things we have in common. I have a lot of people I call friends, but I don't even trust the ones closest to me with all my secrets. In fact they're probably the least trustworthy, but they are a means to an end. An end I have now finally achieved, more or less. I just need to take care of any lingering complications, like Spencer and Aria. And you."
Ashley blinked a few times, too shocked to be angry, and then murmured, "You bitch."
I'm enjoying this series quite a lot. Interesting development to have Ashley join the A team. Not sure I liked her being somewhat submissive to Mona, but thinking about it, it's probably in character for her. Ashley has never been particularly domineering.
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February 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 17: I personally prefer Hanna submitting to her mom, but this was still a very enjoyable chapter.
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January 24, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 16: Heh. This chapter seemed just tailor-made for me. Loved Ashley discipling Emily and Hanna. She was strict with the two pretty little lesbians but not overly harsh, and they even ended up enjoying their spankings! Very hot. Alison & Mona seemed to think so as well. ;)
Don't think it'll take Ashley very long to turn her beloved daughter and her daughter's BFF into her submissive bitches.
Good work, MTL.
Don't think it'll take Ashley very long to turn her beloved daughter and her daughter's BFF into her submissive bitches.
Good work, MTL.
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January 11, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 14: That was a pleasant surprise! Ashley Marin punishing her naughty daughter, much in the way I suggested.
chapter 15: A little disappointed there wasn't more Ashley/Hanna, but still a good idea to check in on everyone. And Spencer taking her big sister's anal cherry was pretty damn hot.
chapter 15: A little disappointed there wasn't more Ashley/Hanna, but still a good idea to check in on everyone. And Spencer taking her big sister's anal cherry was pretty damn hot.
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August 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Well, this was certainly a very nice series of chapters for those of us who like general depravity. I'm actually curious where the story is headed, and if you plan on giving it a main ending. We definitely seem to be in a solid middle, as all the relationships have actually developed into their own rhythm. I could see it ending in some kind of orgy or with A somehow gaining long term sexual control over all of them, or really any number of things.
The quality has been top notch for the most part, though the Aria/Ella bits are still a bit weak. I completely love the Spencer/Melissa stuff, though it seems that you're less interested in it than I am given it takes up a comparatively small part of the story.
I am kind of curious what Mona's endgame is. She wants to "marry" Hanna, but doesn't mind having sex with other people or mind when Hanna has sex with other people. I wonder if she actually loves and trusts Mistress A or if she plans on double crossing her in some way.
Presumably it is Alison who is behind all of this. There's some kind of weird, I don't know, psychic ability to know exactly how to press the right people into these depraved sex acts. Even with A's competence it doesn't seem likely that A could have just figured this out naturally. The complete lack of missteps on A's part is one of the few problems IMO. It might be nice (hilarious) to have a chapter where it is revealed that, say, Mike and Byron called the damn cops after A threatened them to try and force them to suck each others dicks. Really at this point we'd need actual magic for any of this to make sense.
Keep up the good work. All of that was extremely enjoyable.
The quality has been top notch for the most part, though the Aria/Ella bits are still a bit weak. I completely love the Spencer/Melissa stuff, though it seems that you're less interested in it than I am given it takes up a comparatively small part of the story.
I am kind of curious what Mona's endgame is. She wants to "marry" Hanna, but doesn't mind having sex with other people or mind when Hanna has sex with other people. I wonder if she actually loves and trusts Mistress A or if she plans on double crossing her in some way.
Presumably it is Alison who is behind all of this. There's some kind of weird, I don't know, psychic ability to know exactly how to press the right people into these depraved sex acts. Even with A's competence it doesn't seem likely that A could have just figured this out naturally. The complete lack of missteps on A's part is one of the few problems IMO. It might be nice (hilarious) to have a chapter where it is revealed that, say, Mike and Byron called the damn cops after A threatened them to try and force them to suck each others dicks. Really at this point we'd need actual magic for any of this to make sense.
Keep up the good work. All of that was extremely enjoyable.
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August 10, 2013 at 12:00 AM
this is hot, more Ella and Aria scenes.
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August 3, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Haven't checked out this story for a while, but I liked these last 3 chapters. Especially chapter 10 with the kinky Spencer and Melissa action.
And chapter 12 ended on a promising note with Ashley fantasizing about sexually dominating Hanna, which brought back some fond memories of the 2nd chapter of yours and LL's newest PLL story.
And chapter 12 ended on a promising note with Ashley fantasizing about sexually dominating Hanna, which brought back some fond memories of the 2nd chapter of yours and LL's newest PLL story.