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October 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This is top quality stuff right here. Thank you so much for writing and sharing! I loved how in-character everybody was - you put in little details about their mannerisms to the point where I could just picture them acting like that. It looks like it's been awhile since you updated, so I am guessing this is it - but I definitely agree with other reviewers, in that I'd love to see a continuation of this story.
I do also agree with Jermaina that there are some spelling and punctuation errors - given that most of it was fine, I am guessing you just need one more editing pass to catch everything.
Anyhow, I still feel a bit silly for reviewing this so long after it was posted, but it's brilliant, and I couldn't not tell you that. Thank you again for your awesomeness!
I do also agree with Jermaina that there are some spelling and punctuation errors - given that most of it was fine, I am guessing you just need one more editing pass to catch everything.
Anyhow, I still feel a bit silly for reviewing this so long after it was posted, but it's brilliant, and I couldn't not tell you that. Thank you again for your awesomeness!
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June 18, 2013 at 12:00 AM
definetly worth a read... i hope you update soon!
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January 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this was spectacularly well written. I really enjoyed it.
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December 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
That was a good story. No sobbing, no drama or other nonsense, like most K/S stories I've encountered so far. I absolutely loved the sex scene - it was a pleasure to read. I also like the fact that you didn't try to create some weirdish alien sh*t for Spocks genitals and simply used an ordinary penis.
On a negative side, there are a few spelling mistakes (you wrote "to met" instead of "to meet" and "loosing" instead of "losing") and an unnecessary comma in "met Spock's unresisting, lips".
Plot-wise, I think it's a bit silly that they talked about masturbation, but that's not a big problem, so it's just my opinion. I also think there's more men like about women that their breasts :P
Aside from that, I'm glad I read this story. It was refreshing. Good job!
On a negative side, there are a few spelling mistakes (you wrote "to met" instead of "to meet" and "loosing" instead of "losing") and an unnecessary comma in "met Spock's unresisting, lips".
Plot-wise, I think it's a bit silly that they talked about masturbation, but that's not a big problem, so it's just my opinion. I also think there's more men like about women that their breasts :P
Aside from that, I'm glad I read this story. It was refreshing. Good job!
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March 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh please continue!!!! It's an amazing fic, plus I adore your writing style. Not to mention I would love to see how Kirk and Spock work through the days ahead. <3