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June 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This was very well written. I liked the way the characters stayed true to the show while the action became R rated. It was enjoyable. My only complaint is being unable to find more of writing. Thank you for sharing this.
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January 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I've read most of your stories over the last two years or so, many of them more than once, and I would like to point out a few things.
You're an excellent writer who doesn't beataround the bush too much. You give just enough imagery to propel the story along without bogging it down with useless elements. However, I have noticed you reuse a lot of that imagery. It's actually understandable, you've written A LOT of stories on here, but to anyone who is a fan of your work, each new story feels like you're making the same two characters have sex repeatedly, even if their personalities are different.
For example, you've used this to describe a woman's nipples in a large number of your stories:
"they were brown and about the length and diameter of the first joint of his little finger" <----This Story
"about the length and diameter of the first joint of his middle finger" <-----Bad Girl
"She found her nipple hard, swollen and extended to its full finger-joint length and diameter" <----Kindred
There are others but I didn't think it would be a good idea to click through that huge list to find them all. And this isn't all you repeat. As I mentioned above, it's understandable, but it might make dedicated fans of your work feel like they've read it all before. Luckily, these problems don't seem to occur much at all in your multi-chaptered stories, probably because you're having to come up with something new for them to do with each chapter.
It's not that serious of an issue, but it really can bring your attention out of a story when you feel like you're experiencing dejavu because you used very similar descriptions for a lot of very different characters.
Anyway, I just wanted to leave a constructive review and tell you your work is very under-appreciated. Besides the problems I stated above they're a good read, and you don't get nearly enough reviews. Keep writing!
You're an excellent writer who doesn't beataround the bush too much. You give just enough imagery to propel the story along without bogging it down with useless elements. However, I have noticed you reuse a lot of that imagery. It's actually understandable, you've written A LOT of stories on here, but to anyone who is a fan of your work, each new story feels like you're making the same two characters have sex repeatedly, even if their personalities are different.
For example, you've used this to describe a woman's nipples in a large number of your stories:
"they were brown and about the length and diameter of the first joint of his little finger" <----This Story
"about the length and diameter of the first joint of his middle finger" <-----Bad Girl
"She found her nipple hard, swollen and extended to its full finger-joint length and diameter" <----Kindred
There are others but I didn't think it would be a good idea to click through that huge list to find them all. And this isn't all you repeat. As I mentioned above, it's understandable, but it might make dedicated fans of your work feel like they've read it all before. Luckily, these problems don't seem to occur much at all in your multi-chaptered stories, probably because you're having to come up with something new for them to do with each chapter.
It's not that serious of an issue, but it really can bring your attention out of a story when you feel like you're experiencing dejavu because you used very similar descriptions for a lot of very different characters.
Anyway, I just wanted to leave a constructive review and tell you your work is very under-appreciated. Besides the problems I stated above they're a good read, and you don't get nearly enough reviews. Keep writing!
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December 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ummm...errr...WOW!!!!! Now that was extraordinary fantastic and what is badly needed in this fandom, more good smut.