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I loved this, it just seemed so real, especially the last chapter, shame you haven't written more. I'd love to see how jack would try to redeem himself for Ianto. like actually pursuing him, and Ianto not giving in easily at all. Like Jack having to work harder that he ever has to get him back

A few paragraph breaks would be appreciated.

What I read seemed really good, except for the lack of paragraphing. I wanted to read on but it was impossible to without formatting. Perhapse you could address this so I can leave a real review?

I've just read the rest of your story and I wanted to say that I liked it. The formatting issue is on chapters one and three - the text appears in one big lump weithout paragraphs. IO dunno why cos trhe other chapters are fine :)

Love this story - the growth from shy, nervous glances to utter ecstasy to shattered dreams is amazing! Please tell me there's more to come! It can't end this way, it just can't!!!!

Pout!! Terrible place to leave it. Please update more soon!

Hehe Wikkid chapter!!! Can't wait for jack to get a lapdance. And I really wanna know what was on Ianto's outer!!!!
Jack catching tosh was wikkid. Hope the Gwack hints don't go nowhere though. I can't stand Gwack!!


One thing that annoyed me though....
Green moon isn't actual a lunar term. A blue moon is (it's the name give. To the extra full moon that occurs every I think it's 12 yrs. The occur ce is the sMe reason why we have leap yrs). Green moon doesn't actually exist.... Well if it does I haven't heard of it and google produced no answers to it either.

Please don't take this the wrong way its just when something like that sticks our too much it sorta stop a reader being immersed as much.

Anyway i can't wait for more Sao if it includes sexy times! :D

TOTALLY loved chapter three. And lap-dancing? A definite yes! I'm sure you'll do a great job with the rest, and being so kind as to incorporate the ideas of your chapter-hungry audience gives you a gold star in my book. "When in doubt, think like Jack Harkness!" I'm fairly certain that's going to be my next tattoo. :D

Woot yah update. Yeah I didn't review very well last time..... Though it was 4 am, which generally means I'm reading on my phone in bed an trying desperately to keep my eyes open. Loved chapter 2 by the way. Especially the admission about being too vanilla and ianto forgetting about the dildo. Nice chap this one. I was half expecting Ianto's humming tomturn into spanking and round 2 for jack. Can't wait for jealous!jack, jealous!jack is my fav character ever :)

Only just found this site, siding havean account yet hence why the review didn't have a name.

Hi, just wondering when this is gonna be updated :)