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person JayDee
schedule November 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I've seen a few of this series on my friend's satellite TV! I think you have captured the tone of the joking and attitudes really well! Alan's probably releaved there isn't oil being drizzled into his buttcrack by the big guy! Almost a shame it stops just before the porno music starts up, as it were... Ahhh well, good flashfic.
schedule November 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
LOL! That was great! Perfect in characterizations. And I lost it with "humping" the marble. Excellent use of alternative Turkey!
schedule November 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
And now I'm taken to Turkey! You guys are imaginative for this prompt :D

Poor Alan! But I'm sure he learned his lesson and will never 'stiff' on tips again!
schedule November 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This one was pretty hilarious, taking after a lot of the digs and quips you see in the show itself. Loved the twist at the end and *especially* the line about how even a Turkish prison was better than dinner with their mother. You definitely get their brotherly dynamics spot on. And the scene with Alan trying to get on the table and failing was just hilarious, with an exceedingly well-done imagery. You had me in fits at that point.

But you still get brownie points for the last two bits of dialogue, that was just awesome.