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October 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Really like your protagonist,seems like a real person.
His conversation feels very natural except for the ... they get in the way of the story. a good way to end an unfinished thought, but I think the story would flow better without.
looking forward to the next part
His conversation feels very natural except for the ... they get in the way of the story. a good way to end an unfinished thought, but I think the story would flow better without.
looking forward to the next part