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for Not Alone Anymore

by maiamajere

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schedule February 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I really hope there is an ending coming! I'm curious where Madi is heading. You've made her child-like but still fierce, which is a nice combo but could make a relationship awkward to work with. Something that could use addressing would bee how she was such a good shot with no training. Perhaps just a dialogue about previous experience or something like that. Like I said, I was totally entranced. I really really really really really really hope you finish!
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