rate_review Reviews

OMG MORE! MORE!!!!!!

The story was amazing. For once I can say, you made the pairing I don't normally read, actually work out quite well.

Just a quick note as I saw you had done this at least twice (I haven't finished reading it yet.

You're using the wrong word.
jester (what you are using)
1.
Main Entry: jest·er
Pronunciation: \ˈjes-tər\
Function: noun
Date: 14th century
1 : fool 2a
2 : one given to jests

gesture (what you should be using)
3 entries found.
1. 1gesture (noun)
2. 2gesture (verb)
3. gesture language (noun)


1.

Main Entry: 1ges·ture
Pronunciation: \ˈjes-chər, ˈjesh-\
Function: noun
Etymology: Middle English, from Anglo-French, from Medieval Latin gestura mode of action, from Latin gestus, past participle of gerere
Date: 15th century

1 archaic : carriage, bearing
2 : a movement usually of the body or limbs that expresses or emphasizes an idea, sentiment, or attitude
3 : the use of motions of the limbs or body as a means of expression
4 : something said or done by way of formality or courtesy, as a symbol or token, or for its effect on the attitudes of others

I've actually just signed up here to review this!
Such a good fic, please update soon - wanna know what's gonna happen next!
xxx

i really liked how this chapter ended, its so exciting. will you be updating??

OMG, I'm loving it!!! Is there more?? I hope there's more!!!!!!!! Please continue, I love your characterization!! xoxo

Brilliant chapter was wondering when you going to update hope it's soon.
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I really love this ...i've never seen this idea for a story before ...are you going to keep going with it ! I really hope so !! I want to know what happens next !! Do you only update here or are you on LJ too ??

Please write more !!!

please please please continue this ! I have never read something like this before and the concept is just great ! i cant believe it hasnt been done before but i'm desperate for more !!

Thanks <3

There are some lines in there that are simply too funny to not carve into the back of my skull for random giggles in the future. That Cuddy opening the door with her boobs is by far my favorite at the moment xD

=D See, I read it even though I said I wanted to wait until everything was posted. I'm not as much of a bitch as I bark about.

Poor House's apartment. All though precious trinkets of nostalgic goodness, poofed into a pile of ash. What about Steve? D8 You didn't kill the rat, did you?! Noooo~

I like where this is going, especially since you've told me where it's going xD You better update now. Because I can only last so long without updates before I melt away from waiting... Not that I have any write to comment about being timely. Feel free to shoot me, love.

Constructiveness Ahead:
-There just a couple points where the rhythm of the paragraphs sputters a bit, I'd suggest reading it aloud to listen for those bits. It's small things like how one sentence leads into another, or the structure of a paragraph. Keep in mind that I'm odd and definitely have no idea what I'm talking about =D
-When House is trying to get Wilson to ask him to stay at his place, House's intention isn't immediately clear to the reader. Consider reworking that section. Or maybe it was just me? It just sounded as though House was set against Wilson asking, and then suddenly he wants him to ask.
-When characters stammer, it's not necessary to actually break the words apart in a stammer x3 To begin with is fine, but after it's introduced that the character is speaking with a stammer, it's not necessary. It kinda breaks the clarity of the speech.

Again, I really have no basis for suggesting the above since I don't know what the hell I'm doing when I write [not that I have in ages x'D], but I figured I should be of some use while I have the time.

*love u long time* x3