rate_review Reviews

Hmm, this is pretty good, I rather like it! The plot's great and so is the character portrayal, as well as the interaction between Max/Alec. And the sex is pretty damn hot! I wish I could say the same about your writing though, oh well.

You see; most of the time it's decent, but you've a lot of typos, some spelling mistakes and grammar ones too. However that's not what annoys me the most and that's the lack of capital letters in a lot of sentences (throughout the entire story, so far). Especially in character names and places; for example: White is a surname, so it should be spelled with a capital letter, both Crash and the Space Needle are names of places, so they should also be spelled with capital letters!

Just a friendly tip! Also remember to always re-read what you've written before posting it, that way; you'll be able to spot typos and such! I hope you'll see this as helpful and not as bad critic!

So Max let it slip that she loves him, nice. Cannot wait to read more, so please update soon...

I really liked this story. i personally think alec is hot and much better for max than logan. I cant wait tosee more. A scene in water might be cool. Just a thought. I hope you update soon.