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I got soooooo wet reading this!  I actually started to finger myself when I thought of Michelle and Comet...... and Becky with the twins...... please..... more..?

 

That was Great, please write more I want to know what happens next; I am on pins and needles.

weird story, but good one.

nice job. not great. It was a okay story line, had no grammar mistakes(at least none that i noticed first/only time around)Sad to say it was a great disappointment for me that it had no intro at all. Unless you count an immediate focus on the sex as an intro. I certainly do not. plus, there was a confusing ending ""Michelle," D.J. called to her youngest sister, motioning her over with a finger. Michelle made her way across the floor to her oldest sister, who lowered her mouth to Michelle's hairless snatch and began to lick Comet's cum out of her pussy, mixed with her own juices."

I got what you meant, but you worded it wrong. other than all of that i felt it desires another chapter. KEEP ON WITH THE WRITING.

SINCERELY,
A FELLOW WRITER FAN

awesome story. I've been wanting a good full-house story like this!