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by VodouBlue

schedule December 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wonderful short dance with the right amount of description. Only suggestion i have is to not put in the sounds but write it out to where it says he's groaning and such. That makes it a lot more descriptive and draws you into it more.

Kudos on this though. Good job!