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October 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic stuff. Good writing style, but could be a little more evocative of the sexual... oh the hell with it. MORE DETAILED PLZ!!1!!!
But seriously, looking forward to some more good work.
But seriously, looking forward to some more good work.
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October 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good job on the new chapter, please do your best to keep it coming. Please add a little more smut.
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October 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter update soon.
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October 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good job on the update, please do your best to add more to this story soon
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September 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter update soon.
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September 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story can't wait for the next chapter update soon.
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September 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful story. I enjoyed it
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September 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok you seem to be doing a good job with everything else except the intimate scenes. Very few teenage boys, no matter how mature they are, would be satisfied with head over and over again, especially when they are given the option of doing whatever they want. Also, more detail is usually a good thing. If you want an example read some stories from Midknight: http://tv.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=23639
Take these only as suggestions to improve the scenes and not take it personally. I check this story every day for new updates.
Take these only as suggestions to improve the scenes and not take it personally. I check this story every day for new updates.
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great job on this story so far, I hope you'll add more soon
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September 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great work.