rate_review Reviews

*LOLs @ "kissing booth"* .....hehehehe.....sorry. ahem.

Your plot is promising, and your development of the sexual tension between Booth and Bones is good. You do have some stylistic problems. Watch the order of your words. Word order is very important in English. Also watch how often you use a word, on of your sentences uses previous twice, you could drop the first previous and the sentence would be fine. Also you had quite a few spelling errors, the two that I most noticed were dumby (dummy) and Ladder (Latter) make sure to check for that, you also had some gender problems like her felt her breasts. The last thing I noticed was that you switched tenses a lot. A story such as this is usually told completely in the past tense, however if you wish to use present tense to make it seem more like the events are unfolding like they do on T.V. make sure all of your verbs are in the present tense.

Keep writing, because I like your story and I think you have real promise.

Oh sexy!!! I liked the kiss. I hope to see more naughtiness soon!

Why in the world did Adrian keep Summers alive? That is just bizarre.

Hope to see another chapter up soon. This story is really shaping up to be terrific!

Thanks for the new chapter! I hope you post soon the next chapter!

Bones Bones Bones!!!
Ah Criss Cringle!!
Ah mistletoe kiss!!!! I much prefer the extended kiss. And this story. You just gotta love BB love!

Hi, your story is very good! Please keep going and post soon!

Oh that was awesome!!!!
So incredibly sexy.
I really really really want to see more. Don't we all want Booth in the shower with us?!?!?!

Ever since I first learned about the kiss I have been running scenarios through my head. Then seeing the episode just cemented my dirty thoughts. :D Such an amazing episode. Can't wait to see another chapter, please update soon.

You have to keep going! The sexual tension at the end of the last episode just begs for a confrontation.

Oh, and by the way...good so far.