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Wow, congrats - a finished story! And you went out with a bang, so speak. How does it feel to finish a long story? I greatly appreciate you finishing this one, as it's one of my favorite stories from you. I hope this gave you a taste for finishing what you've started - I look forward to more endings to ongoing stories you've got posted here!

Well done!

I agree with Wolvie, this story should just be between Jackie and Donna. This story is very hot.

Great story.... PLEASE continue!

Love the new chapter and I loved it when you featured lorrie mabye you could include so other guest girls in That's 70's Show like the girl mickael dates in the first episode of season five of hyde's sister

I like the new chapter, especially the ending! Way to go, please continue!

You made a great story. I enjoyed every moment of it.

Love your story please update soon,if you could please include a chapter where donna or jackie has sex with eric's sister lorrie

Ok, first of all kudos for staying with a story for more than a one shot chapter. Personally I've never really watched the 70s show or Smallville, but I think Laura Prepon and Mila Kunis are hot (and so are the Smallville girls), so that definitely helped. I can't help it but to me it feels as if the story got somewhat stagnant in the relationship between Donna and Jackie after the first couple of chapters. Sure, you introduced them to real S&M and added Chloe and Lana - a job well done I might add - yet they always seem to be doing the same stuff sexually: spanking, whipping, name calling, ass fucking, that's about it. I think it would be great if you could find a way to let the girls become more creative in exploring the S&M parts of their relationship more in the upcoming chapters. The butt plug and enemas was/is a nice touch, keep implementing ideas such as these into the story, it will help loosen (no pun intended) things up for the reader.

Nice writing, look forward to reading more of it!

Feedback, pt. 2: I've posted my previous feedback without going over the reviews before (which is something I usually don't do). After reading all of wolvie's posts I have to agree with every single point made: It would be great if you could find a way to explore the non-sexual part of Donna's and Jackie's relationship more (I've already mentioned that I also love reading about the sex part, so please don't forget that either). I realize that they've only been together for a couple of weeks, so the two of them fucking like bunnies and not doing much else probably is realistic. Then again, relationships evolve, and so do the people in it. I agree with wolvie that it would be a great if you could work that into the story - if you still don't want to write a chapter without sex I guess you'll just have to write (even) longer chapters... ;-)

I am on the second chapter and so far it is very hot and very good.