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February 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This was very well written. Some very hot moments....reay a tease.. It's a shame that this area seems to be dead along with the show...your story definitely deserves more hits let alone reviews.
Hmmm...Rygel's character definitely feels off to me. Now granted there are moments when he shows his soft side in the show but those are very few and far between and not really until late in the show when he starts to see the crew as family. Now of course I could see him being all nice to get hmself an ally with Holly, much as he tried to do when John showed up. Certainly that point when he kneels before Holly and apoligizes is off....at that point I'd see him calculating......a person he can control? That would appeal to him.
Can't really say I'm pleased with the whole crais thing. IF that's where you want to go that's where you want to go. But I read this kind of fan fic to see the hot characters I like getting it on. Adding a new hot female isn't a problem but then adding her to fuck Crais loses my interest. The chiana bit had appeal. I dont know where you're going with this. A romance with Crais would lose me fast but it is a well written piece so I'd probably keep reading. That is if you bother to. I know how much feedback helps and the extreme lack must be disheartening.
Anyway...if you want to draw more responses out of me go ahead and ask....I find it difficult to write good reviews that are the sort of thing I like to hear about my own stories.
Keep up the good work.
Hmmm...Rygel's character definitely feels off to me. Now granted there are moments when he shows his soft side in the show but those are very few and far between and not really until late in the show when he starts to see the crew as family. Now of course I could see him being all nice to get hmself an ally with Holly, much as he tried to do when John showed up. Certainly that point when he kneels before Holly and apoligizes is off....at that point I'd see him calculating......a person he can control? That would appeal to him.
Can't really say I'm pleased with the whole crais thing. IF that's where you want to go that's where you want to go. But I read this kind of fan fic to see the hot characters I like getting it on. Adding a new hot female isn't a problem but then adding her to fuck Crais loses my interest. The chiana bit had appeal. I dont know where you're going with this. A romance with Crais would lose me fast but it is a well written piece so I'd probably keep reading. That is if you bother to. I know how much feedback helps and the extreme lack must be disheartening.
Anyway...if you want to draw more responses out of me go ahead and ask....I find it difficult to write good reviews that are the sort of thing I like to hear about my own stories.
Keep up the good work.
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January 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Lovely! Perfection! Is it sad thast I'm reviewing my own story for self gratification? Yep.