schedule
June 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I have to agree with magenta, this story is poorly developed. there's hardly any plot, no characterization, and several places where proofreading your work would have helped. also, lizzie isn't old enough to even GO into a porn shop, let alone buy something, and it's "clit" not "clint." sorry.
schedule
June 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
what does Matt do?
schedule
December 23, 2002 at 12:00 AM
well its an excellent storyline and plot. And I loved it but you could be a little bit more detailed. I look forward 2 the second chapter