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for The New Guy

by Kingofbass40

person Annie
schedule November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hI sORRY TO SAY BUT CAN YOU WRITE THIS STORY AGAIN AS YOU HAVE DISJIONTED SOME OF THE CHAPTERS IT WAS HARD TO FOLLOW. i AM FEMAL HERTO BUT MY BROTHER IS MALE HOMO AND I TRY TO UNDERSTSND HIS WORLD WITHOUT GOING TO HIS CLUBS AND THIS IS MY ONLY WAY

i LIKED YOUR MURDER STORY BUT FELT YOUR LOVE STORY ALTHOUGH GOOD NEEDED A LITTLE MORE COURTSHIP . A LOVE DECLARATION WITHIN A DAY OR TWO SEEMS A LITTLE UNREALISTIC JUST TWEAK AROUND A LIITTTLE WITH THE STORY AND i AM SURE IT WILL BE ONE OF THE BETTER LOVE /COMMING OUT STORIES.

YOU BROKE MY HEART WHEN YOU DID NOT KILL OFF ECKLIE THAT CHARACTOR DESERVES TO DIE

mUCH LUCK WITH YOUR WRITING

ANNIE
person Lila
schedule November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am absolutely adoring this fic. But without the double spacings, it's really really hard to read. :( Usually, there's a rule that you're supposed to space everytime a different person talks. It really makes things easier to understand. ^_^ Just a suggestion. I love the fic though!