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July 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Just right. Very erotic without being filthy. The dialogue was very well written and very appropriate for the characters. Well done!
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August 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
awwww lovey. I always knew there was something between those two. Looking forward to more.
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March 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay. This is now the third time I have read this story. I can actually see it in my head. I love it. I love that I can hear Mal speak and see her reaction. I will probably come back and read this again.
I do have this to say though, and take it as you will. This is the first time I have ever continued to read a story after the formatting has gone wonky. I don't know if it is you or aff, but there are no spaces between the paragraphs. Normally, I jump right out of that. But I honestly didn't notice it until this reading, your story is that good. Just a recommendation, if you will, fix up the formatting, and the lack of capitals at the beginning of your sentences, and I will read this story again...and again...and again...and again...
Lovely job, by the way.
I do have this to say though, and take it as you will. This is the first time I have ever continued to read a story after the formatting has gone wonky. I don't know if it is you or aff, but there are no spaces between the paragraphs. Normally, I jump right out of that. But I honestly didn't notice it until this reading, your story is that good. Just a recommendation, if you will, fix up the formatting, and the lack of capitals at the beginning of your sentences, and I will read this story again...and again...and again...and again...
Lovely job, by the way.
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January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
beautiful story
short and intense
thank you
short and intense
thank you
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January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thought I'd leave you a review and express my enjoyment of this mighty fine story of yours.
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww, schucks! This is so cute! Except for the lack of capital letters and other grammatical errors, this story is sound. Well done.
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sweet!
I wish you'd slowed down the action just a little more, though. It felt rushed.
You might also want to double space between your paragraphs. It's kind of crunched. But I adored it. I always thought there could be something between Kaylee and Mal, except that Inara really really would NOT take it very well.
I wish you'd slowed down the action just a little more, though. It felt rushed.
You might also want to double space between your paragraphs. It's kind of crunched. But I adored it. I always thought there could be something between Kaylee and Mal, except that Inara really really would NOT take it very well.
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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story. It's so sweet. I like Mal/Kaylee together. I really love Jayne/Kaylee best. I hope you will write one. I would enjoy reading one that was writen by you.