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Ok the first part was nice Rodney is the center of eth stroy. Second you filtered off, why? Third nicly detailed, you did a fine job of not going off ona detailed tangent. More please? Oh Dose Rodney get rescued differntly then the eposod gose, how is he changed? How dose he change in how he treats others? Do he and ronon get it onj cues that would rock my world for a ending. Anything else you want to know?

If you want people to be constructive, you're going to need to give them more than fragments. I, personally, don't feel right giving FB on a fic that isn't finished yet. This one in particular, jumps around between three different places, with no connection between them, and very little reason (that I can see) to not just stick with one story line, rather than making us sit through tedious sex scenes, and then throwing Elizabeth angst at us, when from the very beginning we're so hooked by Rodney's trauma that all we want to do is get back to it, why not just *stick* to the Rodney story? Sure, you may be down a f chapewters, but you'll have much happier audience.

not too much to be critical in this one..It is written with feeling and you have really nailed rodneys character. You have the snark and the dialog down really well and you have written his mental anguish after the rapes with a finese that a lot of other writers lack in some way or other. It makes you really feel for rodney and what has happened to him. The chapter jumping from Rodney to Carson and Elizabeth was a bit confusing at first but i can understand why. i think i know where your going with this so please update so i can see if i'm right. In some sentance you've missed a word or two and that makes it a little hard to follow but then again who doesn't. It's like the sentance doesn't read right but it doesn't marr the story one bit.

I hope that you are still working on this story. I want to read more! I love Rodney and a angsty hurting Rodney is the best. I hope you post more soon.

it's a really great story and i couldn't find any thing to be critical about. the story is written well and it flows from one paragraph to an other really nicely. i really hope you update soon as i love any stories with rodney angst and this one has plenty and is really riviting. the only thing that i found confusing was how it jumped from rodney in chapter 1 to carson and cadman in chapter 2 but that could just be my slow brain.
i look forward to reading some more soon, so pretty pretty please update

Excellent story and well written but it jumped too much from one chapter to another. I would like to read about what else happens to rodney and how he and the others deal with what has happed to him.

I am really enjoying the story but i must admit the Mckay story is what i am most botherd about i can't wait to see how he deals with what has happend to him
and who is there to help him get though it.

Thanks to whoever gave me the five stars, but since just about everyone has them here, I would have appriecated a constructive three or four. If you guys want another chapter, I need to have a much more constructive review than "I liked it," although thank you for saying so.

I like the beginnings of this story.
Please write more