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October 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the best shorts I've read in a while.
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October 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just loved it!!!
Let´s see if the episode ends like this.
Let´s see if the episode ends like this.
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September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg ya you have to continue this ... wow!
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September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed this story. It would be great if you could continue it.
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September 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! This was a great first fanfic! I just wanted to mention a few things that might make it a little better.
1. Sara is a known germaphobe, so the chances of her sleeping in nothing but her bra and panties in a hotel are less than stellar.
2. Sara probably wouldn't sleep in her bra. Sleeping in your bra is really bad for your back and Sara would probably know this.
3. It seemed to move a little too fast. I didn't really believe that they'd just have sex after so little talk when they woke up like that. It seemed as if maybe Grissom had initiated things while he was still asleep, it might've been a little more believeable.
But other than that, I was amazed. Definitely keep on writing! I'll be looking for more from you in the future!
1. Sara is a known germaphobe, so the chances of her sleeping in nothing but her bra and panties in a hotel are less than stellar.
2. Sara probably wouldn't sleep in her bra. Sleeping in your bra is really bad for your back and Sara would probably know this.
3. It seemed to move a little too fast. I didn't really believe that they'd just have sex after so little talk when they woke up like that. It seemed as if maybe Grissom had initiated things while he was still asleep, it might've been a little more believeable.
But other than that, I was amazed. Definitely keep on writing! I'll be looking for more from you in the future!