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August 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
k....
so i liked the story... but there were a few things that bugged me...
first of all.. it was hard to tell who was speaking
also you switched tenses ALOT! wich made it a little hard to follow.
you also missed a few things EX: tommy james oliver went to tommy steven oliver and then back again.
all in all i enjoyed it.
keep writing. :)
-sarii
so i liked the story... but there were a few things that bugged me...
first of all.. it was hard to tell who was speaking
also you switched tenses ALOT! wich made it a little hard to follow.
you also missed a few things EX: tommy james oliver went to tommy steven oliver and then back again.
all in all i enjoyed it.
keep writing. :)
-sarii
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June 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I loved your story. I really whis you would do a epolog (or how ever it's spelt) just to show how they are fairing a few years after the defeat of Mesagog.
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November 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey great story please update soon
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October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
When are you going to finish??? The Story is really good so far
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August 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good stuff update soon please
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July 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey, I just read this story now. It's excellent. Please carry on.. I really want to know what happens next.
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoy Tommy Stories. I think this story is really good. Please finish it. I want to know what happens to Kim