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March 26, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Poor Nate if that was his first time he had to of been stunned into silence at first!!!
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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O M G! I want, no make that I need more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh so hot!
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May 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I'm not really a Naley fan and I do hope I keep an open mind about all pairings when well written. In this instance, I liked your story. Unconventional and a great Nathan portrayal after the coma episode. Brooke's attitude was spot on. She was daring and unashamed as she is in the series. The built up to the actual sex scene was nice. I like that it wasn't just a PWP and that its content gave some insight into the characters. The sex was sexy and I especially liked that you kept Brooke in control, I really wouldn't see her otherwise.
The only critique that I can bring is in the form of a suggestion: reread some of the paragraphs towards the end. They happen to be a bit flowery and long which makes it hard to read and maintain focus for the reader. But otherwise, I commend you on a well written fic with an unconventional pairing!
Good job!
The only critique that I can bring is in the form of a suggestion: reread some of the paragraphs towards the end. They happen to be a bit flowery and long which makes it hard to read and maintain focus for the reader. But otherwise, I commend you on a well written fic with an unconventional pairing!
Good job!