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what happens next?? hehe.. it's good, I'm hooked!

That was very good. I was watching Abyss earlier today and Ba'al is so sexy and I could just see this all happening in my mind. i'd like to see a sequel.

Dude, this was really good. Finally, some Ba'al fic. I think the sexiest Goa'ul should get more coverage (Or less, depending on what's covering him ; ) ) I was wondering if you're going to continue this fic or if it was a one shot. It'd be funny if Jack came to rescue her and she was like 'no...I think I'll stay' Anyway, I really enjoyed this fic and don't listen to the first reviewer. He was way to harsh and I thought you tied most of the ends together, just leaving the end hanging to keep us wanting more.

Interesting! Keep it going!!

Please use spellcheck, and edit for word usage and grammar. There are quite a few spelling errors and grammar errors, which if the piece was re-read and carefully edited, could be rectified. Also, the sudden turnaround in Carter's attitude was not fully explained, it just suddenly happened. The character's voice was inconsistent for this lack of explanation. The ending was weak, as it did not tie up the story to any type of satisfaction. The transition from the SGC to Ba'al's place du residence was weak. What happened to the recue efforts? Is there going to be more script? Is this a WIP? More work required.