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March 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
honestly, i love this story. I had enough of reading male-female stuff.....so a couple of months ago....i became more interesting in female-female relationship.
Lorelai seems to have a little bit of affection reserved for Paris
i hope that when you descripe your sexual scenes, it should be a rough but still very very much love in it.
you should make lorelai give paris all the love she never had. it should be very sensual and lovely but ROUGH!!!!!!!!!!!VERY ROUGH! once it starts.
at the beginning, im guessing it's paris's first time so Lorelai could go slowly on her. then when it starts....hum.........no hold back.
don,t stop.
maybe you could also write something with Lorelai-rory. And no it's not disgusting. we're talking pure love here.
if you have any stories like this, please, feel free to email me or if you have i dont know, something with my post....
honey_wally@yahoo.com
i would love to discuss this with you
Lorelai seems to have a little bit of affection reserved for Paris
i hope that when you descripe your sexual scenes, it should be a rough but still very very much love in it.
you should make lorelai give paris all the love she never had. it should be very sensual and lovely but ROUGH!!!!!!!!!!!VERY ROUGH! once it starts.
at the beginning, im guessing it's paris's first time so Lorelai could go slowly on her. then when it starts....hum.........no hold back.
don,t stop.
maybe you could also write something with Lorelai-rory. And no it's not disgusting. we're talking pure love here.
if you have any stories like this, please, feel free to email me or if you have i dont know, something with my post....
honey_wally@yahoo.com
i would love to discuss this with you
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March 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Can't wait for more.. :)
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March 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I tried to review this at FF.net, but they were down and your email wasn't up there. Thankfully it's here and I can give you a review.
First of all, BB on FF.net is a moron. This story was far from awful, it was very inspired. At first going in I thought I was going to read another rote Lorelai/Luke fic because of your description, but this story proves that the summary might not draw you in, but the words will. I was so pleased to discover this was a Paris/Lorelai story as the first chapter went along. I've read some L/P and they haven't been able to perfect them as a couple quite yet. But you made it wonderful with the flashback to the night before; Paris going through the video collection, and the both of them debating things in the way they did, they're both born arguers. Using the videos and Lorelai's underlying choices as a trigger for her to start to question things, that was a good move. The conversation they had was natural, and I think you showed Lorelai's empathy for Paris' life very well in her thoughts.
As I read more and more into this, I found myself liking it. I'm usually a Paris/Rory shipper (I write Longing...), and the previous L/P stories have been lacking the the two women's dark humor and views on life, Lorelai with her happy-go-lucky style, and Paris' more cynical view. Somehow they came together in this argument, and ended up in a kiss that changed how both of them saw things in their lives. We don't know how Paris feels yet, and I don't know how you plan the next chapters, but I definitely want to read them. This is a great story, and I liked how everything closed with Lorelai in the diner feeling weird and not in the mood for her usual Luke-teasing or her breakfast. She's just thinking about Paris...and if those small sparks in her are true. You have me thinking about what's happening for them in the future, how Rory will take it, and what they'll be doing with this attraction.
I'd like to invite you to post this on the GilmoreGirlsSlash Yahoo group I co-mod ( http://groups.yahoo.com/group/gilmoregirlsslash ), we're always looking for more femslash to read, and especially in other couplings besides Rory/Paris. This is great work, and the only thing I'd probably ask is that you do a grammar check; the sentence "Bound? I didn’t expect you to watch this kind of movies." should've had 'these' instead of 'this'. Since you're from Germany though, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt since the story around it is so good it almost negates that small quibble of mine.
Email me back; I'd really like to hear from you and maybe chat :)!
First of all, BB on FF.net is a moron. This story was far from awful, it was very inspired. At first going in I thought I was going to read another rote Lorelai/Luke fic because of your description, but this story proves that the summary might not draw you in, but the words will. I was so pleased to discover this was a Paris/Lorelai story as the first chapter went along. I've read some L/P and they haven't been able to perfect them as a couple quite yet. But you made it wonderful with the flashback to the night before; Paris going through the video collection, and the both of them debating things in the way they did, they're both born arguers. Using the videos and Lorelai's underlying choices as a trigger for her to start to question things, that was a good move. The conversation they had was natural, and I think you showed Lorelai's empathy for Paris' life very well in her thoughts.
As I read more and more into this, I found myself liking it. I'm usually a Paris/Rory shipper (I write Longing...), and the previous L/P stories have been lacking the the two women's dark humor and views on life, Lorelai with her happy-go-lucky style, and Paris' more cynical view. Somehow they came together in this argument, and ended up in a kiss that changed how both of them saw things in their lives. We don't know how Paris feels yet, and I don't know how you plan the next chapters, but I definitely want to read them. This is a great story, and I liked how everything closed with Lorelai in the diner feeling weird and not in the mood for her usual Luke-teasing or her breakfast. She's just thinking about Paris...and if those small sparks in her are true. You have me thinking about what's happening for them in the future, how Rory will take it, and what they'll be doing with this attraction.
I'd like to invite you to post this on the GilmoreGirlsSlash Yahoo group I co-mod ( http://groups.yahoo.com/group/gilmoregirlsslash ), we're always looking for more femslash to read, and especially in other couplings besides Rory/Paris. This is great work, and the only thing I'd probably ask is that you do a grammar check; the sentence "Bound? I didn’t expect you to watch this kind of movies." should've had 'these' instead of 'this'. Since you're from Germany though, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt since the story around it is so good it almost negates that small quibble of mine.
Email me back; I'd really like to hear from you and maybe chat :)!
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March 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oo.. I'm liking this so far. I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep up the good work, and update soon. :)