rate_review Reviews

how 'bout an up-date?

great story

So far this is a very entertaining story. Your character portrayals are good, the storyline very pausible. I'd like to read more - please update!

Very well done. Classy. Nice work.





Mike

Please continue this story! Things were just getting very, very, very interesting and I was loving Paris/Lorleai.

I like your storyline, however you need to work on your grammar and spelling a bit. The linebreaks are very good, it's easy to read and all in all a descent story.

ey there, come on update!
that story is really original pairing
I just hope you will put a lot of nasty, naughty, sex play between Lorelai and paris.
I mean REALLY REALLY REALLY NASTY NAUGHTY!!!! if you know what I mean!

HEY HEY HEY HEY NOOOO CLIFFHANGER PLEASE CONTINURE PLEASE THIS IS ME ON MY KNEES BEGGING PLEASE!!!!!

PLEASE, PLEASE update soon!! I want to find out what happens over the weekend between Paris and Lorelai! Something naughty I hope. ;)

There's a hell of a lot I like about this story. For one, it's a Lorelai/Paris pairing, which is something different, and very cool. And I like how it's progressed slowly, with Rory as nothing but a befuddled bystander. I can tell that English is not your native language, mostly in the verb and adverb syntax. The perfectionist in me stops and rewrites it as it would normally be spoken or written. For me at least, it slows the pace of the story down, as my reading slows down. But regardless all the elements of a great story are here, and I look forward to more from Lorelai and Paris.