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July 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad but you could re-write it abit and make it a killer story. Add more descripson, details. Go more into the plot, chararcters, and ass kicing girls who save the day. Maybe alittle details on what the wakefield twins do to torture the guys intell the police come. Maybe something really good, catching your eye, make you want to come back for more. Just some ideas to make your story a hit. I like it !
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May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
poor men. too bad you didn't have any descriptions.
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May 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOL! This was great! Five stars all the way!
My favorite part: "Oddly enough, there was never any sign of the twins' parents or of the twins' older brother. Frank had snooped around the neighborhood and learned that there was a family of five living at the Wakefield residence, but the twins seemed to always have the place to themselves."
I've read a lot of the books and have seen the TV episodes, and you're right. We NEVER see the twins' parents or older brother in the TV series. Only in the books. It's like Jessica and Liz have total run of that house without having to worry about paying the mortage or utilities. LOL!
My favorite part: "Oddly enough, there was never any sign of the twins' parents or of the twins' older brother. Frank had snooped around the neighborhood and learned that there was a family of five living at the Wakefield residence, but the twins seemed to always have the place to themselves."
I've read a lot of the books and have seen the TV episodes, and you're right. We NEVER see the twins' parents or older brother in the TV series. Only in the books. It's like Jessica and Liz have total run of that house without having to worry about paying the mortage or utilities. LOL!
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April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome job! I loved how you made the twins kick those guys asses.
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January 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very neatly done...So glad you didn't let them get hurt.