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December 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You're such an accomplished writer!! this was incredibly perfect, in every way. i wish i could write as well as you. i love your work! ^^
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June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First, the critique. I'd mainly suggest a bit more dialogue, and using more paragraph breaks. A paragraph represents a single particular idea, and the huge blocky paragraphs make it a bit tough to read.
That said, I'll have to say WOW!! Kick-ass scene, whew, I was feeling it. I was feeling it so much that in my glee I gave you a rating of Five, and it deserves it (that's one thing I base Ratings on: how I reacted to it, lol, and man, did I ever.)
I especially like physical descriptions of Q, whew, cuz let's face it, he's fine. Q, his Human avatar John de Lancie, either one, fine by me, wink wink.
That said, I'll have to say WOW!! Kick-ass scene, whew, I was feeling it. I was feeling it so much that in my glee I gave you a rating of Five, and it deserves it (that's one thing I base Ratings on: how I reacted to it, lol, and man, did I ever.)
I especially like physical descriptions of Q, whew, cuz let's face it, he's fine. Q, his Human avatar John de Lancie, either one, fine by me, wink wink.