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March 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Complete and utter garbage. Total crap. -_-
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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Did you put ANY effort into this story at all?
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September 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i looooooooooooooooooooooooove it
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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ironic twist of fate at the end. This sucked but I'm STILL laughing. XD
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February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Totaly funny! I loved it! Needs to be longer, but who cares! FUNNNY!
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February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THAts Hot
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December 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I don't want to sound mean but that was horrible. You can't call that a story. You should put in a lot more detail than that. Show Paige walking up into the attic. Maybe show some conflict with Buffy and how she got there. And Pheobe, she wouldn't do that just up and on the run. I think you need to have more of a filler. The summary sounded promising. I like smutt but there is barely any of it. Be descriptive. You can't just put Buffy and Pheobe there and expect them all to start fucking each other. And foreplay. What happened to that? Well, I'm gonna shut up, maybe you will listen to me and go and do some real work on the actual story. -bigreader-
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July 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
what in the world was that? did u not listen to anything I said when u sent it to me!! then u sent it in! ahh
why did u ask me what I thoughtt of it, if u wern't gonna go and change it,;same with your other story, if it is a story.
killing off the characters gave me a laugh because is was rather random how u ended it but honestly it was lazy on your part for not
putting in time to create an actual ending! also if your gonna have the story that vauge u should actually put a storyline and describe it.
that seemed like a good start of a story,an outline kinda, but then u have to elaborate instead of just skipping straight to the sex part of it, if that was even what it was suposed to be.
ahh ok I feel bad now but I just had to get that out.
why did u ask me what I thoughtt of it, if u wern't gonna go and change it,;same with your other story, if it is a story.
killing off the characters gave me a laugh because is was rather random how u ended it but honestly it was lazy on your part for not
putting in time to create an actual ending! also if your gonna have the story that vauge u should actually put a storyline and describe it.
that seemed like a good start of a story,an outline kinda, but then u have to elaborate instead of just skipping straight to the sex part of it, if that was even what it was suposed to be.
ahh ok I feel bad now but I just had to get that out.