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for Wicked Dreams

by ladyaquitaine

person alien_rose
schedule September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
u use the word 'so' too much, and make everyone sound like a mindless valley grl in the process. thats fitting 4 lana but not for chloe. other than that extremely annoying mistake (dear god i pray it was a mistake) everything was fine, nice lem, remember the 'so' thing 4 next time.(useing the word 'like' that much is equally unbearable) i havent read the sequel yet but i hope u didnt do the samething in that 1 too. the lemon, inner battle, and the determind lex (-lolita
person alien_rose
schedule September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
u use the word 'so' too much, and make everyone sound like a mindless valley grl in the process. thats fitting 4 lana but not for chloe. other than that extremely annoying mistake (dear god i pray it was a mistake) everything was fine, nice lem, remember the 'so' thing 4 next time.(useing the word 'like' that much is equally unbearable) i havent read the sequel yet but i hope u didnt do the samething in that 1 too. the lemon, inner battle, and the determind lex (-lolita
i dont kno y this messagegot cut off the 1st time it was sent but here it is again.
person alien_rose
schedule September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
(-lolita
this is the rest of the message. i hav no idea y it was cut off the 1st 2es ies it was sent.
person alien_rose
schedule September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
mssagssage got cut off 3 FUCKIN' TIMES. *ahem* juss wantrd t' let u kno i wasnt juss spastic. i also wanted t' tell u that i did enjoy sum of ur fic. i liked the lem (always a plus), chloe having an alter ego, and lex being determind(and sexy as always)
-lolita